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    dots Submission Name: Golden wings......dots

    Author: ira
    ASL Info:    21.f.ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 238/273/176
    Words: 271
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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       self discovery and life is....it sucks it all sucks....

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    dotsGolden wings......dots

    Golden wings, turn to broken things

    when I was younger I could fly
    I’d look right into the devils eyes
    but now I see
    myself whole and clear
    the little girl I let go of
    I should have held on to so dear
    sorrow bites at every turn
    the world crumbles floods and yearns
    and all I see are my mistakes
    pulling me closer
    closer to my grave
    all I can see
    is what I should’ve seen before
    that way maybe I could’ve done a little more.
    So young my father says to me
    I shouldn’t have these problems
    but he could never see
    I’ve lost my inner child and picked up a life time
    of disease.
    I used to have wings golden and white
    but as I grow older
    the wings themself took flight.
    With every day I find what’s wrong
    with every moment I remember another old song.
    From the childhood I wish I had
    the little white wings I used to have
    everything seems so wrong
    and all I hear are those god awful songs
    pulling me back into the night
    so I cry I run
    I plead to take flight.
    But all my deeds they wear down on me
    I cant find a path to right
    all the things I’ve done
    I cant find the path that will lead me back into the sun.
    I used to have these golden whit wings with feathers
    soft as the angels would be
    but the hands of time and choice came crashing down on me
    and made it so I could no longer see.

    Submitted on 2005-09-07 17:47:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      its so true.when you becaome a teen everything is at its hardest.my momm tries telling me that i should be having a care free life cause i dont have to work and worry about paying bills but i have all this other crap that i have to worry about.you may have lost flawless white wings but in time you will develope brighter and more beautiful wings.rember that and you will be just fine.oh by the way this was a realy good write.

    | Posted on 2005-09-07 00:00:00 | by luvy | [ Reply to This ]

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