Description: well im looking for harsh feed back yet not to harsh this is the first poem i wrote i wrote it when my mom refused to accept my for me and critisizing i was mad and pissed off
You said you were looking for harsh feed back so i am going to answer you questions. where does my sanity go when people hate and discriminate and talk [censored] to there kids It reaches for your beretta how do i stop the suicidal thoughts or this pain that goes on in my head You stop being a pussy and get over your issues why does slicing my wrists make me feel so alive when i know im about to die It doesnt, you just think it does (believe it or not that makes sense in my world) who will stop the pain inside who will stop the rage i hide You will stop it. Sooner or later. who will stop me from wanting to die That would be you again... oh wait your still alive so that would mean you have already stopped wanting to die. where will i go if i succeed in o.d.ing Well... Im going straight to hell, so I guess I'll meet you there. ( hey I have V.I.P reservations you want me to save you a spot, Im Lucifers number one demon we are on a first name basis) where will i go if i stop acting like a [censored] stop crying and start trying to give life a chance I dont know, May-b heaven... but who wants that???
wow i think these all the times the last one i'll never do coz its not worth it somting will just go wrong again lol i enjoyed this and i can relate to this alot so now i no i'm not alone in the world its also very deep and meaning full but also very sad and depressing i really liked this write and i'm goin to add it to my favourites lol take care izzi x
wow i thought this so many times. this is great. so true, alot of people can relate to these im sure. i liked this alot. great job! keep up the good work <3
i liked it, but it was really shaky, it had almost no structure to it at all...i really like i though, these questions have run through my mine before and i have slit my writs and overdosed, i really like the message even though its kinda shaky
it had such great flow nd i liked how you put things but i thought that the first line coulda been broken up a little more or shortened. -it was grreat
Its sad... This questions have gone through my head many times and the answers just come to me... I enjoyed it very much and it made me feel not alone... it also let me feel the feelings of the writter which is deep thought/depression so yeah... I liked this piece... Nice and keep writting
Submission Name: 10 questions
