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    dots Submission Name: Wake up calldots
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    Author: luvy
    ASL Info:    19/F/AZ
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 270/168/35
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Description:
       yeah whatever im just tryin to vent here so if you comment make it simple plz


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    dotsWake up calldots
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    why u judgin me
    am i not allowed to express my feelings and be free
    what am i to you beside the dirt beneath your shoe
    you dont like me because im not like you
    but im glad because people like me are far and few
    when i say something i mean it when i say i feel something i realy feel it.
    to you i didnt do crap but you dont care about that
    tryin to turn my mother against me cause you think shes blinded by love
    but your wrong fool she got 20/20 vision she can see ahat you trying to do
    but you hate so you try and demean me by calling me this and callin me that
    you do all this thinkin shell never leave but your wrong cause she wont always be your boo.




    Submitted on 2005-09-07 19:11:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      seems like ur stepdad is an [censored]. but anyway i did like this one. i think it coulda been longer but u said everything u had to, and u got all this extra stress out. good write.
    | Posted on 2005-09-09 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      Keep writing exactly how you feel and what is in your heart and mind. Beauty is always in the eye of the beholder. I thought it was a very impassioned and forthright piece of writing and well done for that, this makes it a good read.
    | Posted on 2005-09-08 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      i agree with solomon. this is tired and used. if you're really feeling something, prove it. i don't really believe your anger. i've seen this too many times.
    | Posted on 2005-09-08 00:00:00 | by narcolepsy | [ Reply to This ]
      i disagree wut solomon disease the poem was not that bad it was okay buty its was int something that i would adore u know wut im sayin but just keep at it


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    | Posted on 2005-09-07 00:00:00 | by heavy knowledge | [ Reply to This ]
      ok gena srew wat solomon disease said even though if u mad it a poem it should be more emotional. but its not cuz the sturcture for a poem isnt there but if u make it a tid bit longer it would but oooooooooooooooooooooo gena u done dissed ur stepdad! oooooooo weeeeeeeee! anyway love ya sooooooooooooooooooo much!
    ~akaila evonne~
    | Posted on 2005-09-07 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      ugh. boring. yeah - it was dirt under my shoe. stale. ordinary. not cool. i dunno man. it sucked in my opinion. dig deeper next time.
    | Posted on 2005-09-07 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]


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