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    dots Submission Name: freestyleing part 2dots
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    Author: heavy knowledge
    ASL Info:    15/m/slidell, L.a.(N.O.)
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 106/156/34
    Words: 270
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Comedy
    Total Views: 839
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1462



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       THIS IS PART AND FOR PART TWO U NEED PART ONE SO READ THEM BOTH AND LOOK FOR PART THREE COMIN SOON


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    dotsfreestyleing part 2dots
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    Back again freestyin on the net
    If freestying where credit i would be in debt
    But anyways storm came so im out my house
    if that would have been my gurl i just would Have unbotton her blouse
    Haha i find that funny
    Lookin at the paper sayin we build better levis but can for the war give money
    Naw thats not funny but im side tracked but beyounce again
    And damn wouldin u know up comes my lil yet bigggg black freind
    U know who im talking bout u call it jonny or my one eyed snake
    Forget a piece off asss even though it is nice. i want a piece of cake
    Cause like bevis i get everything butt head
    These rhymes aint showin im a thooughbred
    Because im to fat to run ill have a asthma attack
    But u will catch me runnin iff the cops is on my back
    They just chase me because im black
    Or is it because that the color of thier skin i lack
    Forget it and this aint even on subject
    But to u white i dont meen to disrespect
    But for your daughter with the blonde hair i can be erect
    And the rumor about black men is true so its wut she shoud suspect
    Become an inturn off gurl and inturn
    U will get pussy and it wont be a concern
    Woke up withe stick stuff on my dick
    Had a different dream but the same part 1 chick
    So to understand this read part 1
    This is just the middle u have to start where i begun




    Submitted on 2005-09-07 22:41:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i really didn't like this one homie. sorry but i just didn't think it was that good. it's ok 4 a freestyle though. u shoulda named it wet dream. peace out holmes.
    "troy"
    | Posted on 2005-09-09 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]


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