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Will you miss me?


Author: AmandaLyn
ASL Info:    18/F/ Centralia
Elite Ratio:    3.59 - 292 /292 /42
Words: 111
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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this is like a sequel/ part two to summer romance


Will you miss me?



How will it feel?
will it hurt you at all?
How will I deal
Even though I chose this fall?

Will you miss me?
When I’m not there?
Then you’ll see,
you don’t let go of something rare.

You’re the poison I chose,
Our time slipped away
No one really knows
It was the game I chose to play.

Will you miss me
Lying beside you in bed?
When you suddenly
Have me stuck in your head?

Will you miss the way I kissed you
The softness of my touch
What will you do
When you can’t find someone who loves you as much?




Submitted on 2005-09-07 23:03:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is a pure poem with it underline innocence,mixed with the harsh reality of life making tough decisions,even if your were truly sure of it.

Love the poem for it purity
| Posted on 2005-10-06 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
  Thank you for your comment on my poem "God be with you all" I like this poem alot, I can relate to it totally and I write poems like this questioning my absence and future, past & present life is sooo full of questions yet none are answered but only the ones that are easy to figure out anyways thanx again and peace...
| Posted on 2005-09-14 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]
  aww, I am beginning to miss you myself lol j/k
aww very sweet and cute this poem is. even trhough I have not done this in my life yet with any one, but I myself wonder if people will miss me for all the times I had been there for them, or what not.
peace and nice write
| Posted on 2005-09-12 00:00:00 | by dudethis | [ Reply to This ]
  I thought this one was good. The middle verses lost me a little, but all and all I'd say this was a nice piece. It's a really hurtful feeling having to say goodbye to someone. My heart felt your words, they were definately filled with emotion! Thanks for sharing this poem!
Alissa
| Posted on 2005-09-08 00:00:00 | by Geraldine | [ Reply to This ]


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