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    dots Submission Name: Always foreverdots
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    Author: K
    ASL Info:    26/Namibia/Africa
    Elite Ratio:    5.64 - 183/172/46
    Words: 188
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 844
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1148



    Description:
       Another soppy song written in 2003 for the songwriters' competition... This one did not make it onto the demo tape though. Hehehe!!!! I wrote it as a closing chapter to a friendship that started in the womb, 24 odd years ago. Any comments are always appreciated.


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    dotsAlways foreverdots
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    Have you ever thought of me as the one whoíll stand by you?
    Did you ever think of me as the one whoíll comfort you?
    When youíre down and alone
    And you need someone to hold
    Baby, donít be afraid
    I am there with you

    Chorus
    Always forever
    I am by your side
    In the memories of us together I still live on
    So anytime you feel afraid
    Just think of me
    And Iíll be there
    Always forever

    Have you ever thought of me as your bestest friend? (I have)
    Did you ever think that what we had was unique?
    But now weíve both grown up
    And weíre no longer as close
    Thatís okay, itís part of life
    But as long as you believe

    Chorus

    Bridge
    Baby we made so many plans
    But somehow we drifted apart
    And even if I donít call
    It doesnít mean that I donít care
    Maybe you have replaced me with someone else?
    Donít feel guilty, donít cling to the past
    ĎCause I know that in your heart
    Thereís still a part of me

    Chorus x 2




    Submitted on 2005-09-08 00:12:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think it would make a perfect song, one every human who has a heart can relate too and cry too..
    i know that i would probably listen to it again and again right about now.. And since i'm in amood i won't make any other critiques based on the fact my emotions have the best of me at the moment..
    thank you for sharing nik
    | Posted on 2005-09-26 00:00:00 | by k.o.malley | [ Reply to This ]
      the bestest thing I didn't agree with.. and I also didn't agree with the long bridge.. maybe it could have been broken up into 2 parts... and been played to wrap the end of each repeating chorus..


    But either way, I enjoyed the words and the message it brought.. not many people have the luxury of having what the character has in this song.. that's hard to come by so.. all in all i have to say.. keep writing
    | Posted on 2005-09-08 00:00:00 | by daniel05 | [ Reply to This ]


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