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    dots Submission Name: Sexy Posedots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       Wrote this about my sis. We were kidding around one day, and she struck a pose (making fun of me), and said, "Do you think I look sexy?" I was like, "yes, so sexy that I should write a poem about it." And I did.


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    dotsSexy Posedots
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    Her blue eyes dance, her brown hair shines.
    She has a blue book in her arms.
    She has a face so perfect it could make you cry.
    No boy is immune to her charms.
    Her arms are tan, her hair is long.
    She has bracelets on her wrists.
    She has a smile on her pretty mouth,
    With lips that beg to be kissed.
    She laughs and talks with her older sister.
    She strikes her sexy pose.
    She looks so perfectly innocent,
    Wearing someone else's clothes.
    Would you love her selflessly
    If you could see her scars?
    What would you do to make her smile,
    Or watch her play her guitar?
    You can see she's beautiful.
    But can you look within?
    See the heart that beats and thrives,
    See the person under the skin.
    Well, for now you can love her from afar,
    But she's the only one who knows
    What it's like to be this girl
    Standing in her sexy pose.




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      wow i like your poem... you put your words together well... much props and continue with your work
    take care
    and be safe
    | Posted on 2005-09-09 00:00:00 | by peaches | [ Reply to This ]
      Very perceptive and very well written. You have a good style and your descriptive ability is very very good. I can't really find any fault with it - it was excellent.
    | Posted on 2005-09-08 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh yea I love it when I am talked about...or written about,lol. I just can't write [censored] like this and you throw in soo many of all our jokes and sooo much of this is true. I still love reading this.
    Love you bunches
    Jaz
    | Posted on 2005-09-08 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      nice write i like the first few lines

    Sexy Pose
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    Her blue eyes dance, her brown hair shines.
    She has a blue book in her arms.
    She has a face so perfect it could make you cry.
    No boy is immune to her charms.
    that was real nice it was good write and i like the imagery looks like im the first to comment well keep up the good work

    | Posted on 2005-09-08 00:00:00 | by heavy knowledge | [ Reply to This ]
      Aw, this is so cute. What a nice sister you are! This poem really shows so much closeness between the two of you. The meaning of this poem isn't found much on this site, like sisterly love. So cute! Well done, I thought this poem was great! Keep up the good work! Can't wait to hear from you again!
    Alissa
    | Posted on 2005-09-08 00:00:00 | by Geraldine | [ Reply to This ]


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