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    dots Submission Name: To Tonyadots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 780
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 789



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       DO NOT READ IF YOU OBJECT TO POEMS OF A SERIOUSLY GRAPHIC, SEXUAL NATURE!!!!! This was written right after T and I started up with this bullsh*t that we are doing. I felt a little smug, and wrote this to his new girlfriend. T thought it was really funny. I figured he'd be pissed.


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    dotsTo Tonyadots
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    He may say that he loves you,
    But he fucked me yesterday.
    As many times as he could,
    In so many different ways.
    He may be sleeping in your bed,
    But bitch, he's cumming in mine.
    And on my couch, my floor, and my breasts,
    In my mouth some of the time.
    He may be playing with your child,
    But I like it when he plays with me.
    Pulling my skirt up around my waist,
    Putting me on my knees.
    He may be driving your car,
    But he's driving into my skin.
    Filling me up and bottoming out,
    Cumming again and again.
    Yeah, he's planning a future with you,
    Thinking about how happy you will be.
    But even as that is on his mind,
    He'll still be fucking me.




    Submitted on 2005-09-08 09:54:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      HAHAHAHA! This was great! I just feel like saying you go girl! lol Man, if you ever said this to Tonya's face..I'd like to be a fly on the wall for that one. I loved it mainly, cus I would never have the guts to write something like this...but it was well written...and you didn't hold back..and you said exactly what you thought. and it was friggin great. lol...take care. ~hailie~
    | Posted on 2005-09-09 00:00:00 | by loveispain | [ Reply to This ]
      Well it is very clear that you have a talent for writing. I am sure if you have that you have so much more to give also. I agree that it is very explosive, but it was good. Great luck to you. God Bless, Dawn
    | Posted on 2005-09-08 00:00:00 | by Dawnyd | [ Reply to This ]
      Explosive stuff ! Still, there was very clear and structured theme to what you were saying. It was not a rant, but a well thought out piece of writing and well done for that.
    | Posted on 2005-09-08 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      raivn, if this is a poem about passion, it comes off as passionate hatred.you are very clear and to the point about this situation and that is why it is an effective write.with something like this you shouldn't have to pull any punches and why should you?let them have it with both barrels at point blank range.there are, however, the problems that could arise from other readers who might be shocked despite the disclaimer that you wrote in the description box.you please everybody all the time and even if you could, why bother?a very well thought out piece.good luck and fare well. SoNNy
    | Posted on 2005-09-08 00:00:00 | by sickly | [ Reply to This ]


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