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    dots Submission Name: Rachel 3-16-04dots
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    Author: ruejacobs
    ASL Info:    39/feminazi/Gehenna
    Elite Ratio:    4.82 - 619/473/167
    Words: 229
    Class/Type: Poetry/Childrens
    Total Views: 1234
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1428



    Description:
       wrote this one for my youngest daughter, the Squeak.


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    dotsRachel 3-16-04dots
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    Her hands are seaweed
    how they cling
    they are like hope
    She is treacherous as hope
    She is stronger than faith.

    i am guilt
    i am wrapped up in hope like a pinata
    battered, tattered and fading in the sun
    Her voice is a Tibetian prayer bowl
    how it tolls like a bell
    it sets the heavy metronome of my heart
    and rings an echo in my head

    what can i do?
    how could i please Her,
    this Fairy-child, this seaborn Girl?
    my fingers twist the string
    they thread beads as offerings to Her

    i make oaths to Her
    i lie dormant without Her
    i lack audacity
    and do not dare to raise Her myself,
    convinced i'd make another awful mistake
    i am amazed She still loves me at all

    She calls to me
    and i am powerless to resist
    anything She asks of me i will do
    Her will is monumental
    i am in awe of Her

    how could such purity and strength
    come from out of my body?
    how could i have produced
    such a wonderous child?

    She believes in me
    though i can not believe in myself
    She takes my hand and opens Her Poet's mouth
    Her words are a song
    i keep time in my heart
    She says simply,
    "I love you, Momma."
    and then She laughs.




    Submitted on 2005-09-08 13:49:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      MOM,
    AMAZING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    how can you do that with words? i would love to learn this really.i miss cheerio more than i'd miss the sun. anthony can suck on it i don't care.me and kim got in a fight and i didn't do it on porpse ethier. well love ya more than cheerio,
    and more than the world(which if anyone loved it i'd be surprised)
    love always,
    your darling(hahbaby,
    rachey
    | Posted on 2006-05-26 00:00:00 | by century | [ Reply to This ]
      hi mom twas good now i got a steady intwernet acess (via school) i can be here sumtimes so ne way good poem but i no u aint talkin about my sister rite?

    luv
    claire
    | Posted on 2005-10-05 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      I can not give you an unbiased read of this one, Rue. I only wish I too could hear her beautious voice. Sorry, I don't mean to be a downer, you know what I'm going through right now...
    | Posted on 2005-09-09 00:00:00 | by His Assholiness | [ Reply to This ]
      THis piece deserves a merit!... Heh i guess this is what mother feel when they give everything to their child.. but dont really think the consquences of that.. yet... the connection between motehr and daughter in this piece makes me smile .
    Best wishes to all yer family
    I dont know what to feedback.. it was all good
    | Posted on 2005-09-08 00:00:00 | by Depdem | [ Reply to This ]


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