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    dots Submission Name: In this eyesdots
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    Author: josymanthegreat
    ASL Info:    21/m/GA from Puerto Rico
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 337/364/104
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 706
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 994



    Description:
       Nice little lyrics which I would like some comments of any sort on... it can also be read as a poem so yeah... thank you


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    dotsIn this eyesdots
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    Why do you even tell me to wait anymore?
    Let what was yesterday be that and no more
    Why is there so much hatred coming through your pores?
    Just let me explain all my points "mi amor"

    I keep comming back like a dog to his owner
    Every time happy hoping I stop being a loner
    but then you pull those hopes from under
    my hopes and dreams when you do that just plunders

    But it's ok, it's alright, beacuse I dont hate you
    It don't matter baby I'm so used to be used
    To be thrown away when you are done playing boo
    and when I step into a room now everyone calls me a tool

    In this eyes you already see it
    People say im a doormat and ive been it
    If its broken dont fix it
    and feed my soul to chickens

    So why wait anymore?
    So why care anymore?
    Ill tell you why now hun
    It's beacuse today I love you more




    Submitted on 2005-09-08 15:39:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love it. The last line is marvelous It's so sweet. I can kind of relate... I've been there before... Wish I wasn't though. Anyways... I have a favorite part, and since I'm all stuffed with tylenol and feeling much better now, I'll point it out.

    "But it's ok, it's alright, beacuse I dont hate you
    It don't matter baby I'm so used to be used"

    That really seemed to stick out the most for me... I don't know why though. I guess it's because I can relate to that part more than the rest.

    Yup... Well, thats about all I can say. I'm not feeling very wordy right now. Very nicely done dear I love it

    -nikkki

    @>- lol look I made a flower. (I just remembered how to do that.)
    | Posted on 2005-10-01 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      i loved this poem (thats how i read it). very full of emotion and love. if this was for someone. i hope they come to u and feel the same way back to u. maybe she will soon...you never kno. but keep the good work up.
    | Posted on 2005-09-08 00:00:00 | by lil_gh0st_girl | [ Reply to This ]
      aww! That's sweet. Reminds me of that song "Self Esteem" by Offspring. You know you're being used, but you just don't care because you love the person thats using you. Hoping that someday they'll love you the same way too. Cute
    ~Kat
    | Posted on 2005-09-08 00:00:00 | by MorbidAngel114 | [ Reply to This ]
      It's good. I realy like it, full of emotions and so much compassion. The only thing is that the lines could be broken up in different ways. Other then that I really like it. I hope to see more of your work in the future.
    ~Krystina~
    | Posted on 2005-09-08 00:00:00 | by takenspiritwind | [ Reply to This ]


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