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    dots Submission Name: imagedots
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    Author: unnatainable
    ASL Info:    20/F/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 48/42/23
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 1376
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    Bytes: 917



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       i think id had a fight with my parents.. and i felt so different to them..so yeah just whatever your thaughts are


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    dotsimagedots
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    can you see me through a mirror
    see a reflection of my face
    can you touch my virtual picture
    as my image goes to waste

    is my figure so distorted
    can you tell my voids apart
    just smash the mirror, destroy the picture
    just like you broke my heart

    so you see me through a window
    in a diffrerent room to you
    this time i see you on the other side
    like different points of view

    or is the mirror much too dirty
    to see the mud made from my tears
    or stained glass foils the colours
    of the spectra of my fears

    no matter which way you see me
    you'll never see me pure
    A dusty mirror, a cracked window
    inject me with a cure

    come join me on the otherside
    your already here
    double standards a bitch it seams
    an image incinsear




    Submitted on 2005-09-08 18:09:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well written. the different point of views shown made this a great piece. The mirrors and asking if you were distorted ..honestly plain genius. Your a very skilled writer.
    | Posted on 2005-09-11 00:00:00 | by wallya20 | [ Reply to This ]
      it was well done , i liked it but please whatch out with your spelling! keep it up!
    | Posted on 2005-09-08 00:00:00 | by Wolfdawn | [ Reply to This ]
      nice i enjoyed reading your works but yes you did have many errors but thats okay because sometimes when were typing so fast many ppls make error because i sure do. lol... but keep up the good work
    | Posted on 2005-09-08 00:00:00 | by peaches | [ Reply to This ]
      im the same way about the spelling or typos. but over all it was good, rythem and a lil rhym. i get a feeling of self hatred but its kind of faint to tell, very very good detail though, bot much to [censored] about on this one ^v^
    | Posted on 2005-09-08 00:00:00 | by The Blue Panda | [ Reply to This ]


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