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    dots Submission Name: Blood Prints (Part I)dots
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    Author: WindEmpress
    ASL Info:    15/f/meditating
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 95/124/44
    Words: 684
    Class/Type: Story/Misc
    Total Views: 248
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       Muwahaha! This is a darker story, well, in the beginning. This one should be good . . . Oh, and this is only the beginning of a series called Blood Shifters. ¡Hasta Manaña! (God Spanish is annoying . . .)


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    dotsBlood Prints (Part I)dots
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    Prologue

    “Thirteen dead and twenty injured do tell me how all this started,” the interrogator said to me, his blue eyes staring into the depths of me. I haven’t spoken in two days, I haven’t eaten in two days, I haven’t moved in two days, except for a few shifts to keep myself comfortable and I didn’t want to do either for a very long time. I don’t know what happened or even why, but I could remember how it started: people. I kept silent because I didn’t want to tell him but I also knew that they had “ways” of getting me to talk.

    “People,” I said in a whisper causing the man, who was in his mid twenties, to lean onward to try to hear me properly.

    He nodded, irately. He had been that way since I had arrived, always saying ‘thirteen dead and twenty injured’, ‘witnesses had gone mental’, and ‘teachers quitting their jobs’. I didn’t care anymore, none of the other students had tried to help me when I needed it, none of the teachers confronted me as my grades declined, and no one even asked why I had gotten thinner and lost all interest in life. “Yes, people were injured or killed in this case, and people are now asking for answers from you, Miss Fairchild, asking why their child was lying in a bloody heap with marks of a rabid dog!”

    The pictures were flopped down right in front of me: a dead girl with long red hair (Rachel Ferns) had part of her throat missing; an injured boy with short black hair with his shirt missing (Kyle Cooper) had four claw marks down the length of his back. There were many others, but these were the top ones and I knew if I touched the others, they would be suspicious; too late anyway, so I picked up a few others.

    Casey Wood, a perfect prep with the perfect face, had a claw mark down her face, her nose broken, claw marks across her cheek, and a couple of bruises. Tony Coldwell, athletic and full of malice towards everyone, had five holes in his chest, as if someone had tried to drive their hand through his chest; he was alive but he wouldn’t ever be able to compete. Ashley Rouse, the back stabbing, two faced bitch that had become my friend only to deceive me to let my secrets be known, lied dead on a stretcher with, once again, part of her throat missing and a bloody mess near her heart. She had died shortly after the ambulance had arrived when they tried fervently to regain her life back (the caption was right below the picture).

    “Do you want to tell me what happened exactly?” the interrogator asked me with that abhorrence in his voice that I was beginning to odium. Oh, how I wanted to make him go through all that I had every single year of my elementary, middle, and high school years. Every morning, fear of what would come when I walked through those glass doors into the school to find that my friends were missing, again, and there was a group of people ready to mock me. Their mockery always cut deep and left a scar within me no matter how insignificant or how tactless they seemed to be towards me.

    I looked at him, my eyes full of antagonism, horror, and downfall, trying to make him understand, “People,” I said again, “people and their egotism and their malice filled lives. People who think they are better than everyone, people who think that others are there to putdown because they do not join them. Its people and their arrogance towards the rest of the world!!” I yelled the words like a wolf growling at an inferior pack mate who had tried to become dominate. His face changed as he looked into my eyes, he was scared, I could smell it, I could feel it and it made me want to hunt it down and destroy it.




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      damn good. i know you want more feedback, but boy its really good.
    hope you continue on with this story and take on further.
    will be waiting to read the stuff you churn out.
    | Posted on 2005-09-20 00:00:00 | by jassal | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked the anaology to a wolf. Also, the topic you choice is not usual expressed and it's something that should be more so talked about. People are cruel and all about me, me , me. One day someone's gonna snap and they're all gonna pay. Nice job. I'm off to read part 2.
    | Posted on 2005-09-20 00:00:00 | by Renada | [ Reply to This ]
      very very creepy... I like it though. Are you writing another one, or have you already? Let me know!
    | Posted on 2005-09-11 00:00:00 | by thezeroman88 | [ Reply to This ]
      That was awsome. when are you going to write the next one or did you already. I like the ending. It was like oo whats gonna happen next. It was typicall in the beginning (ya know the girl who all depressed and lonely, who doesnt fit in) but in the end it got different ( good different).
    | Posted on 2005-09-09 00:00:00 | by Drea | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very good writing. I think you should keep it going, a series. I am sure many will find this is a good read. It kept my interest all the way to the end of the page. So I can't wait for the next installment. Great job! God Bless, Dawn
    | Posted on 2005-09-09 00:00:00 | by Dawnyd | [ Reply to This ]
      nice u got skills i cant wait to read the rest of the parts to the sagai like the parts about animals and shyt that was kool i like the was u anylised each of them great write keep it up
    | Posted on 2005-09-08 00:00:00 | by heavy knowledge | [ Reply to This ]
      this was really cool. Keep writing the rest of the series, I'm ready to read more of it. We've all felt horrible about people, and what they can do to each other. I liked the whole animal comparisons thing. The main character is very obviously something more than she seems. Very good job.
    | Posted on 2005-09-08 00:00:00 | by thor_s avatar | [ Reply to This ]
      wonderful punchline, made me so interested. i was interested thw whole time and it made me think, i loooove poems like that. i really cant find anyhting to crap on you with this one, not that i want to, but its a lil required. thats why i gave it a 5 dude. side comment, my friend meagan loves stitch too ^v^
    | Posted on 2005-09-08 00:00:00 | by The Blue Panda | [ Reply to This ]



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