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    dots Submission Name: Another Daydots
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    Author: manderz_1207
    ASL Info:    15/f/mi
    Elite Ratio:    5.45 - 95/109/38
    Words: 218
    Class/Type: Misc/Longing
    Total Views: 640
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    Bytes: 1401



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       I wrote this at a very angry time. Which could either be a good thing or a bad, but it's different like the last one than what I usually write. Let me know what you think!


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    dotsAnother Daydots
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    The attitudes of broken hearts,
    the words you say, the tears they bring.
    The anger felt, the moods that swing,
    I'm happy now, yet feel forever sad.
    To sit and take this, I sure as hell won't.
    I don't need this crap, not from you.

    You can't go all this time without a care,
    then one day act like you've always been there.
    Sure you were "there" but useless you were,
    advice I could never get, or tips to being me.
    No little secrets to great friendships,
    only friends who feared of coming and visiting me.

    Everyday, the walk home, stomache of butterflies,
    no knowledge of the conditions you'd be in.
    Always having to be prepared for the worst,
    being able to take control of any situation.
    The hardships we faced, you'll never know,
    deny it might, but I guess that's what you'd do.

    That night was the worst, you were out of control,
    it's funny in a sense, of how you reacted.
    Not a care in the world, senseless things on your mind,
    but I guess that's what happens when your brains fried.
    I thank god everyday for having that happen that night,
    bad I admit but you finally learned, that things weren't right and stopping was a must.





    Submitted on 2005-09-08 20:25:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      oh my goodnes this was was amazing. it realy described the [censored] my stepdad does and the reason i hardly ever have people over at my house. i can real relate this is going on my favorite list. you tell me that i have talent have you ever read your writting. cause that my friend is skill.

    ~Gena~
    | Posted on 2005-09-16 00:00:00 | by luvy | [ Reply to This ]


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