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    dots Submission Name: Sexual Side Effects Part 2dots
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    Author: SouthrnQT
    ASL Info:    24/ Female/ Florida
    Elite Ratio:    4.51 - 290/271/31
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 1582
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Just a continuation of Sexual Side Effects Part 1. I just love the steamy stuff..hehe.


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    dotsSexual Side Effects Part 2dots
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    Eyes flutter open
    this dreamy reality awaits
    scorched by this conquest
    this journey to be filled with liquid pleasures

    Screaming out, letting go
    No more wanting, waiting
    sacrificing one another to desire
    diving into our own sexual abyss

    Surrounded by the musky scent of animalistic fever
    Dillusionary delecacies
    drenched in succulant perspiration
    salty and sweet

    Enveloped by skin, convulsions erupt within
    drowning in rivers of milky white
    peaking in blissful unification
    Until finally....collapsing as one

    Like a ring, it's neverending circle....
    We take of each other once again......




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      You have a way with words. You are very artistic. I enjoyed this piece. I never would have thought to write a poem called sexual side effects. That also show that your mind truly expands. You shall be stalked and both this one and part I will be added to my favs list. Thank you for doing a great write.
    | Posted on 2006-01-19 00:00:00 | by B-Gentle | [ Reply to This ]
      I think my brain just melted.
    What I like about this one is not only do you have the desire, passion and incredible sex, but almost a limitless desire to be together. As if just being with this person is more vital than the next gulp of oxygen. Wonderful. I hope you never, ever lose that feeling.
    Traci :)
    | Posted on 2005-10-04 00:00:00 | by onetruesmartass | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow...once again I'm in awe at the way you can convey all these desires in such a tasteful way and yet make everyone get so completely hot at the same time! You've got to be proud of yourself for that.
    Just like the first it's sensual and sexy, loaded (and unloaded) with passion!
    You are amazing with your words-absolutely wonderful write!
    Candi
    | Posted on 2005-09-13 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmmm, sexual abyss. Sounds like fun. You captured that dreamy sensation of intimacy, the way it almost feels so wonderful that it can't be real. But it is. And that's the incredible thing about it. I like this one very much. Keep it up!(You do, and I'm sure you'll have reason to write many more of these!)
    | Posted on 2005-09-10 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      How I wish I were your bedsheets right now. And thankfully this isn't a work day, because I won't be getting up for a while.
    Wow.
    I love how you write, you don't have to be raunchy and dirty to be sexual and that's sensational. You have a way with words, and a way with my temperature it seems. Could someone throw me a napkin so I can wipe the drool?

    Your talent explodes in this passionate poem, and I know I can expect to see even greater things from you. Another great write for you.

    Always in awe- Grey
    | Posted on 2005-09-10 00:00:00 | by Greyson | [ Reply to This ]
      Liquid pleasures...and I ain't talking 'bout beer!

    Excellent work Avry, a perfect companion piece to the first, I'd like to see one big work, although, you will make me happy by describing the "afters" won't ya?

    Ya gotta be happy with this

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-09-09 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      I haven't read the "Part 1" part.. But if it was anything like this one then it had to be magnificent.. Ha.. The details were great.. But they were blunt, so thats what made it even better...

    Keep It Up

    ~Kimberley
    | Posted on 2005-09-09 00:00:00 | by Blindly-N-Love | [ Reply to This ]
      OK, I cracked open a beer and found my voice. I am going to comment on both parts here and be prepared since I have been speechless for a bit and the beer is working on my tongue...

    First of all, both parts are magnificently done and your "descriptions" are just vivid enough for me to need to cool off after reading each one.

    In the first one, I liked how it flowed so easily from the dream state to reality with "eyes fluttering open" You give "dancing" a whole new stage to play on between the sheets
    It is just enough steam for a vivid imagination to enjoy your indulgence and think of a few of my own...
    "My body writhing as my mind concocts desires
    unfortold"

    "As his hand finds my skin
    fingertips pad across the forbidden"

    Now that is WOW - extremely visual (not to mention a few other senses stimulated)
    It kind of leaves you still in the dream feel...that eyes not yet open but enjoying the dream...

    And so we then get to the second part...
    Where, fully awake you leave off the sweet dance...and begin the fevered "journey to be filled with liquid pleasures" (excellent line - love that liquid pleasures)
    You are much more descriptive in this piece...it's hotter and more ...more...something (speechless)
    "sacrificing one another to desire
    diving into our own sexual abyss"
    This comes from pure pleasure experienced and could not be said any better...

    And your last 2 lines...another WOW...
    These are 2 pieces that are pure sensuously erotic and very well done...

    Ok, I think I'm back to speechless and in need of the fan...
    Excellent pieces Avry
    Lisa
    | Posted on 2005-09-09 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
      lololol oh my gosh that's freakin incredible! sounds yummy too. 2 people that wrapped up in each other...awaiting a dreamy reality...they must not have met in person yet...but they still have such strong feelings for each other, such overwhelming and total desire...is that kind of love really possible? hmmm, i definitely believe in it.

    once again, you're incredible. your words make me happy.
    | Posted on 2005-09-09 00:00:00 | by treybur | [ Reply to This ]
      mmmmmm very nice... i love the words, the images and just the piece overall...it brings about a very warm feeling and not just a sexual one...it is about pure passion and desire and you describe it well...i love writing pieces like this :) and it sure seems like you do too :) well done..im adding this to favs...
    | Posted on 2005-09-09 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]


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