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    dots Submission Name: Inches of Solitudedots

    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       I was sitting outside with Tony last night on break, inches away from him. I couldn't get him to say a word to me. I don't know what's going on.

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    dotsInches of Solitudedots

    I sit here by your side,
    Merely inches away.
    I want to reach out to you,
    Find the right words to say.
    You hide your head in your arms,
    Blocking your face from my sight.
    Despite your presence, I feel so alone.
    I ask if you're alright.
    You look at me, just for a moment,
    And you nod your head.
    Then you retreat into your shelter.
    There had to be more I could have said.
    I look at the body I know so well,
    The hair with which I used to play.
    I always knew the exact thing to do,
    I had the perfect words to say.
    Now these inches feel like miles
    That I can't travel alone.
    And the distance between you and I
    Has become unfathomable as it's grown.
    So I sit here, by your side,
    Merely inches away.
    I want to make you smile again.
    I just don't know what words to say.

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      I can relate to this piece all too well...it feels awful when you are so close...feel so close and so much for someone and yet they seem so distant and far away...perhaps there is something he is not yet able to express...time and encouragement will most likely allow those feelings to be spoken about...the only other time i feel this way with my partner is when there is a break down in communication...however with my ex husband it was a regular thing..he was just emotionally unavailable much of the time...this is a great write and i am going to add this to my favs...thx for sharing
    | Posted on 2005-09-09 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      aw...girl...I'm sorry this happened. I know what it's like to feel totally disconnected to someone...but I hope you guys find your way back to eachother. The write was great...I felt your pain...felt your lonliness...I hope it works out. I really do. ~hailie~
    | Posted on 2005-09-09 00:00:00 | by loveispain | [ Reply to This ]
      i really liked your poem Inches of Solitude. As i was reading it, it was like i saw myself within the poem. i know the feeling of sitting right next to someone and not having the right words to say. i also know the feeling of feeling alone even if you are in a room full of people
    | Posted on 2005-09-09 00:00:00 | by Jac | [ Reply to This ]

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