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    dots Submission Name: Behinddots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Alone
    Total Views: 573
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    Bytes: 504



    Description:
       Just a short, sad thought, making use of a line that I really love from a poem my sis wrote about me...

    "Once I was yours, now I'm just mine..."
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    dotsBehinddots
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    Once, I was something,
    Now, I'm just me.
    I'm lost and lonely,
    Don't know another way to be.
    Once, I could smile.
    Now I just cry.
    Tears form from nowhere.
    I wonder why.
    Once, I was loved.
    Now, I'm alone.
    I've lost everything
    That I've ever known.
    Once, I was yours.
    Now I'm just mine.
    There's nothing that remains of me,
    But the darkness that you left behind.




    Submitted on 2005-09-09 10:20:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow very sad and very short but sweet...it says so very much and makes me feel a sense of loss reading it..i hope you can find or regain what it is that you have lost..and it is love ..if not with the same person but with another...
    | Posted on 2005-09-09 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      good short poem. went together quite well. I think we all feel this way at one time or another. But keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2005-09-09 00:00:00 | by soul_driven | [ Reply to This ]
      nice short and very well put together... keep up the good work...
    it had a lot of double questioning and that always makes a poem nice nice nice...
    | Posted on 2005-09-09 00:00:00 | by peaches | [ Reply to This ]
      great poem awesome rhyming ! You are great I love you're work !
    You're poem's are very nice it has nice wording .
    great work .
    | Posted on 2005-09-10 00:00:00 | by IndependentGirl | [ Reply to This ]


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