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    dots Submission Name: Wistful Deathdots
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    Author: darkness child
    ASL Info:    21/F/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 195/266/48
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 915
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 569



    Description:
       It's an odd poem, isn't it? It just means that I'm sorta dead in my mind, dreaming. Physically, i'm here, but mentally, i'm on Mars. ^.^


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    dotsWistful Deathdots
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    Such deep feelings,
    I drown in.
    Life seems to exist,
    In sighs.

    I dream and ponder, endlessly;
    Awake but not quite alive,
    And yet, I keep pretending,
    I can be if I try.

    Feel forgotten, feel mislead,
    Hush now close your eyes and sleep.
    Please don't worry, I'll soon be dead,
    Then I can forever dream.

    I'm not alone, darkness falling,
    Spying eyes are fast asleep.
    Ghosts of me, lingering; longing.
    Please, let me Forever Dream.




    Submitted on 2005-09-09 11:02:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i to feel this way alot of the time great wording nd flow i can relate to this poem very easily but what you can work on is maybe the way you choose your words like maybe go back and youse other words then the ones you chose
    | Posted on 2005-09-09 00:00:00 | by demonic | [ Reply to This ]
      NYce work i loved it Glad u posted Its just short and sweet not odd by any means there r alot of deep feelings in there sometimes even i feel i could dream forever ,lol My favorite lines were :

    I'm not alone, darkness falling,
    Spying eyes are fast asleep.
    Ghosts of me, lingering; longing.
    Please, let me Forever Dream.

    Great Write Check out some of my work if u got some time I'm No Talent
    | Posted on 2005-09-09 00:00:00 | by No Talent | [ Reply to This ]


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