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    dots Submission Name: slutdots
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    Author: morte
    ASL Info:    17/female/earth
    Elite Ratio:    4.7 - 430/348/55
    Words: 210
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Perhaps the worst thing i've ever written, but lately ideas pop into my head and they won't go away until i write them...once i wrote this i just figured i'd go ahead and post it, perhaps there's some way it could be saved...tell me your honest opinion and if i should just toss this out or if not all hope is lost...thanks


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    Now that the end is near,
    I feel the need to confess.
    Perhaps to give warning,
    Or rid myself of guilt.
    Maybe to say one last word…

    The whole time we were together
    I was having an affair,
    With irrationality.
    From whom I’ve caught a disease…
    A bad case of insanity.
    Chances are I passed it to you.

    I left your warm embrace
    And wandered the cold streets.
    Looking for a good lay.
    Took a wrong turn and wound up
    Getting wrapped by mortality.
    Guess I was asking for it,
    You should’ve seen how I was dressed.

    And then there was the one night stand,
    With someone very close to you.
    A few too many drinks
    Mixed with some pretty words,
    And I forgot about you
    And your passionate love.
    For an all too familiar face…

    Why am I telling you this?
    To let you know that we’ll all
    Cheat on you and leave you.
    Your once upon a time lovers…
    Your lying, unfaithful mates…
    Men and women alike.

    Perhaps that’s why you’re how you are:
    Jealous, demanding, unfair.
    But Life, try to understand,
    When it’s all said and done
    We all have our one night stand…
    We all get fucked by death.




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      oh my god alex, that was awesome. i really liked how you connected life with a real type of relationship. it made it seem all the more real. i really liked how you gave all the examples of how life decieves us...or we are distracted...whatever...and i loved the ending...we all get [censored]ed by death. awesome! i will talk to you later.

    -Nathan
    | Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by Podenco del infierno | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow this is pretty powerful and a very remorseful piece...you have really expressed yourself well which amongst other reasons makes me feel that your title is not fitting..i really dislike that word and feel that it is a word that should be taken from the english language ...perhaps unfaithful woud be better although perhaps not enough in your eyes..however we all make poor choices but it doesnt make you a bad person...maybe once you can move past this you might be able to call it something different
    | Posted on 2005-09-09 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]


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