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    Author: uncreaTED
    Elite Ratio:    4.86 - 58/69/24
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Meditation is often visited by cartoons to entertain the monkeys that swing through the trees of your thoughts. The following is a revelation that came during one of these intermission breaks that plague my mind.


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    Verity

    Depth of faith vividly displayed
    in hypocrisy of callous actions.
    The deafening silence of hollow words
    echo down corridors of insincerity.

    Too many bridges left burned,
    a testament of broken promises.
    Apologies roll of heartless tongues,
    turning molten passion to pumice.

    Bitter compassion thwarts forgiveness,
    leaving an eternity spent on hold.
    As hope diminishes like a burning wick,
    excuses drain an hour glass in time.

    Below pity humanity's buried,
    when the mind is filled with eyes.
    Thoughts manipulated by foresight
    extinguish perception of the senses.




    Submitted on 2005-09-10 06:51:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I hear in this a crying out for self and for others in this relationship where we are forced to look inside in meditation.
    I find it difficult to ascertain the beauty that spiritual wealth gives us in such lexoconic language. And to think that these thoughts were a part of meditation is truly puzzling. When I am thinking of beauty and peace of mind, I am in meditation. Is this an example of how the mind can play tricks on us and make us lose our way?

    When we look into ourselves, its true we find all kinds of things we don't want to see. They say that looking at anything with a loving eye gives it's beauty over to us.

    Bitter compassion thwarts forgiveness,
    leaving an eternity spent on hold.
    As hope diminishes like a burning wick,
    excuses drain an hour glass in time.

    And here you show us the failings of religion in America, we don't work to purify the heart and make our actions loving
    from the core of ourselves, we just say something false.

    But something I read today says much on what you're giving us. When we give up our anger, pain, and suffering it turns to energy and light. It's a brilliant use of light and so is this work, Ted. I think I'll save this one.
    peace and love,
    Nan
    | Posted on 2005-09-11 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked the following passages:
    "The deafening silence of hollow words"
    "a testament of broken promises"
    "Bitter compassion thwarts forgiveness"

    I like the fact that you create your images with contradictions in terms. Hollow words creating a deafening silence.

    I think a lot of the things you said here are true, though, i think the way we look upon the world is the way we will see it. Through what tinted glasses do we see the world? Rose tinted glasses with rosey ideals, or blue tinted glasses steeped in depression?

    I can defiinately feel the emotion in this piece. I can tell that you thought this one out. Good job.

    | Posted on 2005-09-10 00:00:00 | by Linksquest | [ Reply to This ]


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