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    dots Submission Name: Blazin’ Daze Enddots
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    Author: H_K
    Elite Ratio:    2.51 - 4/8/1
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 232
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Smoke that shit!


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    dotsBlazin’ Daze Enddots
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    A pungent cloud
    Swirls ‘round my head.
    While the bowl
    Glows deep orange-red.

    This cannabis
    Has set the mood.
    So, now I go
    in search of food.

    I stumble down
    A shifting hall,
    And stop to fix
    A leaning wall.

    My knees are gone,
    They’ve disappeared
    My mind is numb.
    I think I’m smeared.

    So, loaded down
    With food I’ve swiped,
    I settle down
    To hit the pipe.

    I flick the flame
    And take a hit,
    Choke, and hack,
    That’s real good shit!

    My aches and pains
    Just float away.
    A lovely way
    To end the day.



    By: Harold




    Submitted on 2005-09-10 16:54:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      nice, nice. this poem is sweeeeeet.



    peace
    Grim
    | Posted on 2007-07-07 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]
      H K

    Not bad at all
    The rhyme scheme used in this write carried well and you were easilly ablke to get your message across

    I am not saying I agree with the message though
    Being that I am a former Drug Addict of 5 Years
    (Im now almost 2 years sober THANK GOD)
    I know the dangers of drugs and how quick and fast they can destroy someone

    Granted my addiction was to a much stronger drug in my case Crystal Meth but Marijuana does kill Brain cells so I dont agree with you that it should be Legalized
    But again that is just my opinion and has nothing really to do with the quality of this write
    Great Work!!!
    You described yourself well
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-04-12 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Dude...you have...wow...this was...gray...t!

    Love this, it is so right on with a buzz...loved the leaning wall

    This read...very well...I...wow!

    And now I really have to go
    As I'm really diggin the flow
    You've got me thinking 'bout another hit
    Damn you're right this is good sh*it

    Excellent & Very well done, Welcome to the site - here...wanna hit?
    Lisa
    | Posted on 2005-09-16 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
      yup this is what I thought--with the toitle and seeing your main page and chell and traci below are 2 good ones here at es--so looks like you are in fine hands.
    Ya know I wrote a weed piece a while ago-it's short but maybe I'll post it-you inspired me-I'm also gonna go hit the bong late........it's also a good way to start the day.
    LT
    | Posted on 2005-09-12 00:00:00 | by LameMansTerms | [ Reply to This ]
      I see that my best friend has beat me to a comment, once again! This was a cute piece. I hate shifting halls, and leaning walls! I like the rhymes in this, they don't feel too forced.

    Take Care, and Welcome to the site!
    -Chell-

    P.S. I love your alias!
    | Posted on 2005-09-12 00:00:00 | by Chell | [ Reply to This ]
      lmao this is great!
    I've had many a moment that was exactly like this. You've captured a "stoned moment" very well. Great work and welcome to the site!
    Traci :)
    | Posted on 2005-09-12 00:00:00 | by onetruesmartass | [ Reply to This ]
      Excellent work, and so identifiable to so many people!
    The munchies...how come we get the munchies??? I like all of your smashed up references, fixing the leaning wall was fantastic, and I like "smeared" that's a great description!

    No criticism from me, it's funny and I loved it!

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-09-12 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]



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