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    dots Submission Name: prAydots
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    Author: unnatainable
    ASL Info:    20/F/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 48/42/23
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 1043
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    Description:
       ummm yeah anythign is good... its not so much religous as a longing for redemtion or for a sacrafice of love


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    as you see the angels rise
    will you think its all a game
    when you see me die
    will you whisper my sacred name

    when you see your soul inside
    will you watch it ebb away
    will you sacrafice yourself for me
    so i may live another day

    the sunlight golden streams
    are browning my hands, warming my face
    so i run to find the blackness
    the cold heart out of place

    my weakness calls me now
    you will never go away
    and i pray..




    Submitted on 2005-09-10 18:39:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really enjoyed it , Very good thought . Upu are a great writer . I really enjoy you're work . Unique work I like that . It shows some thought and work .

    Great Job.
    | Posted on 2005-09-11 00:00:00 | by IndependentGirl | [ Reply to This ]
      i really liked it. described quite a bit and i could see the point of it. i like the words u used for the poem and i wish my poems were as good. great job
    | Posted on 2005-09-10 00:00:00 | by lil_gh0st_girl | [ Reply to This ]


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