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    Author: unnatainable
    ASL Info:    20/F/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 48/42/23
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Poetry/Mirror or Mask
    Total Views: 927
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    shadows fall
    across the floor
    eternal tones
    nevermore

    silver outlines
    shimmer away
    silver to gray
    has left a stain

    frozen cold
    in a photoframe
    a memory lost
    is a picture gained

    a tiny fragment
    a peice of past
    all emotion gone
    an image outlasts

    grey ghosts
    haunt these walls
    a photo of shadows
    betrays them all




    Submitted on 2005-09-10 18:43:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i really liked the line "a memory lost is a picture gained"

    it kind of gives me the impression of like, a box of memories that you have after a relationship ends and you don't know whether you want to burn it and never see it again or keep it so someday you'll remember the good times that you had.
    | Posted on 2005-09-11 00:00:00 | by jeffiner | [ Reply to This ]


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