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    dots Submission Name: Brothers in Heavendots
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    Author: Inducted_Kitty
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 309/426/117
    Words: 289
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       The loss of two sons in a 5 week period, my oldest and my youngest, amongst 5 sons, is too much for any Mother to handle....don't know if the rhyme or the metre is correct, but don't much care with this write...


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    dots Brothers in Heavendots
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    Like sand sifting easily through fingers
    like grains of my pain and my fear
    Like the times that my broken heart clings to
    like the sorrow of this past year.

    Like my sons leaving me with no warning
    like my two broken angels, they call
    and they say "Please don't worry about us,
    We are fine Mom, no worries at all!"

    Five weeks apart you both left us
    your 'big brother' took care of his own
    He met you in Heaven, my Brady
    he knew you could not be alone....

    I know in my heart you're together
    I feel it in all of my bones
    And I know he is taking good care of
    our youngest, though I'm sure he moans...

    "Oh Brady! you shouldn't be joining
    me in death, you are far too young yet
    I made my decision to leave here
    my fate had already been set.

    If you thought you could easily find me
    If you died just to be with me here
    I must tell you I had to search far for
    your soul, which to me, was so dear!

    I wish I could send you back, Brother
    I truly wish I only could
    For our mother is grieving so deeply
    at our graves she has so bravely stood...

    But, I can't give you back to our Mother
    I can't take back what you have done
    But I promise to take care of you Bro
    I have thought of you as my own son."

    If we are together forever
    our Mother will then come to see
    That you are safe, crooked in my arm now
    you are safe, Brady, here with me..."






    Submitted on 2005-09-10 19:10:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ...i am at a loss for words trying to hold back the tears getting heavier each second. Im choking on incomplete sentences figuring out what to write. I know that I wouldnt sympathize because to me in order to sympathize you have to know exactly how that person feels. But this poem...I am truly sorry for your losses. But at the same time I admire your strength. You have found a way to grieve, and grieve beautifully. I have no doubt that you inspire many writers on this site with your courage and strength as you have inspired me. I deeply admire you Cher, you are one of a kind. Your words are always true and heartfelt. "Brothers In Heaven" has won its way onto my many walls of favorites, but it will be with the ones I cherish the most. You have outdone yourself as I sit here still trying to hold back my tears. Today I have already raisen my goblet of water to Mike (inspirit), so for you I give you two roses and as well I raise my goblet for you strength, may it never falter in the weakest of your moments but grow stronger with each passing day.

    Tracey
    | Posted on 2005-09-11 00:00:00 | by fiery_eyes | [ Reply to This ]
      Cher,
    I admire you and have the deepest respect for you. You are expressing your grief the way you can deal with it. Cher, you are doing it the right way. You are a strong woman. Even though sometimes you might not feel as though you are. Your sons are two Angels up in heaven. They are looking down at you with a smile. Cher, as always your write is a beautiful piece. Give the other "boys" a big hug from me...take care Cher, wanda
    | Posted on 2005-09-11 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ]
      As Alia said, I don't know what to say either Cher. This is a piece from the heart that is so very hard to comment on... most people would run a hundred miles after reading this... for to comment on something this heart-rendering is pain in itself. Pain for loved ones gone from me, pain for you...

    Two sons in a five week period? Oh truly what can I say that won't sound patronizing or insensitive? Here is a big hug and a kiss on your forehead... from me and from anyone else here on Elite Skills.

    I nearly lost my mother when I was thirteen, you know... so very close... it made me grow up really fast and look out for myself at an early age. She was involved in a car accident while getting a lift back with a friend of hers - it hit a powerpole and she was the only one critically injured (how is that for injustice?). Since she was 7 months pregnant, she wasn't wearing a seatbelt at the time.... as a result she was in a coma for a few days in E.R., with me not knowing whether she would live or die. I spent a year or so with one of my mum's friend's family, living with them, visiting my mum every weekend while she was in a spinal rehabilitation clinic. She got minor brain-damage from a blood-clot in her brain, and after 10 years, she is still not quite the same... but she is still here... and for that I am grateful.

    Why did I tell you this Cher? I haven't told many people this ever... it still hurts to remember that pain of helplessness, of that scare of death. But for you, it is a double tragedy. I am so sorry. Nothing I can ever say will make it go away. I can empathize but I will never know for sure because I am not you... you made me cry Cher, you really did. You make me and others realize that life is so precious, that people are only here for a limited time to spread their love and personalities... but we all endure in someone's memory.... and we all fade at some time too.

    *Hugs*
    Jase
    | Posted on 2005-09-10 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]
      omg... honestly... there is nothing that can be said... there are no words... not for this poem and not for what you are going through... it is wrong that a mother should have bury her children... thats not the way life is sposed to work and whether they die as close together as yours have or years apart there is still no sense to be found... i am so sorry (though i realise you will have heard this so much that it means nothing to you anymore...

    i like the hope you have found in this piece... that your boys are together and the strong bonds of love that hold them together and hold them to you... that is comforting at a time like this in some ways...

    i told you the other day my heart broke for you but i think that was only the beginning... i am completely broken from having read this and my prayers are yours... id say be strong but sometimes strength is a lie and being brave is not what is needed... so if you gotta cry and tear your hear out then go for it... just remember that you have been through so much lately and you need to be good to yourself...

    ugh! i feel so useless and like this comment is just words... i cant find anything useful to say... im sorry...
    | Posted on 2005-09-10 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      in the middle of this poem i started crying. i kno how it feels to lose a child...it sucks i kno. i really loved this poem alot. the words u used were amazing and just...perfect. i hope u do well...god bless
    | Posted on 2005-09-10 00:00:00 | by lil_gh0st_girl | [ Reply to This ]



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