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    Author: nobody6
    ASL Info:    14 female peace river ab
    Elite Ratio:    2.82 - 26/29/8
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 632
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 708



    Description:
       It sounds unfinished because i still dont know what's going to happen.


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    I never thought I'd see this day,
    I never thought I'd feel this way,
    You...a stranger to me now.
    I'm left with emptiness...
    I wish I knew how it could be,
    That we were once so open and free.
    You were like my brother.. yet so much more
    I wish I would have seen what I see now before.
    For, I did not and it's too late...
    My friend, is now unknown.
    And what hurts the most is I now know..
    What I lost.. and I'm alone.
    To face a challenge life has sent,
    And not a moment with you I've spent.
    I hope one day I can forgive you, my friend..
    I miss you....






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      well, talk to your friend. me and my friend just today got into an arguement a bit. i told her to not call me if she chooses the path I wish her to not.
    her and i been there for years since 1995. knew her a bit longer since 1984, but got closer.
    anyways, i help her alot and been there for her vice verser. when i told her to not call she ot mad.
    but in seconds we forgave each other.
    trust mre, talk to him.
    if you care to chat to me about it for more suggestions or questions, pm me.
    peace
    | Posted on 2005-09-11 00:00:00 | by dudethis | [ Reply to This ]
      It was ok. But a Title would make it more interesting. Title seems to be the main thing to attract readers. Was a good write. Felt the pain of loosing a friend. Thanks for sharing with us
    | Posted on 2005-09-11 00:00:00 | by Poetic Cure | [ Reply to This ]
      so can you frogive your friend? but also remmeber it cant always be just one person

    i liked it i felt it and the flow was good, i don tthink it sounds unfinished because how you ended makes it sound more original..good write
    | Posted on 2005-09-11 00:00:00 | by crazzybeautiful | [ Reply to This ]


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