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    dots Submission Name: Ataraxisdots
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    Author: uncreaTED
    Elite Ratio:    4.86 - 58/69/24
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Enlightenment can last a moment, or pass in a heart beat. As long as it is, it's Nirvana.


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    dotsAtaraxisdots
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    Ataraxis

    The soul swings by a precarious thread,
    a pendulum with opportune moments.
    Wondrous state miraculously achieved
    if the spirit resonates with the cosmos.

    Ataraxis can pass in a heart beat,
    wisdom only death can preserve.
    Tranquility, treasure of ultimate wealth,
    when reality breathes forth truth.

    Eternity would vanish as mist at dawn
    if a virtual placebo could satiate a vacant soul.
    Hope, a magnet, attracts possibilities
    that illuminate the bleakest day.




    Submitted on 2005-09-11 01:41:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey Ted,

    To me, Ataraxis highlights the fragility of the wanton engagement in life but in a way that directs us to the opposite. "If the spirit resonates with the cosmos" is such a wonderfully direct way to put it what we risk for that. I also really loved the first 2 lines of the second stanza. The fear, or the wisdom of it, sometimes too late. Through contemplation we can achieve the truth and/or peace (or is the act of contemplation also the goal?), but always the fragility or conflict or emptiness threatens. And yet, we continue, we must keep striving for the peace that we dream of or risk much for.

    Overall, my understanding of Ataraxis revolved around seeking that place where everything makes sense (enlightenment), while having to negotiate the waters of uncertainty, failure and temporariness. To be at peace with yourself and the world around us.

    In a way I find hard to explain, I found this poem to be very uplifting while also grounding and a little sad (sad because it can pass in a heart beat). Again, you have taken me to a place in my thoughts where I am afraid I do not often go. I really enjoyed no; greatly appreciated! this poem. Thanks Ted!
    Cheers,
    ~TD
    | Posted on 2005-09-23 00:00:00 | by TD | [ Reply to This ]


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