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    dots Submission Name: Death behind the door.dots
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    Author: meletn
    ASL Info:    20/female
    Elite Ratio:    3.43 - 20/22/9
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Death
    Total Views: 875
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    Bytes: 890



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       Death is very hard to understand it.I saw death very close and effected me very bad.Give in comments as you feel are right and sorry for my english it is not very good.


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    dotsDeath behind the door.dots
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    I never understood what death means,
    why God so big and great and perfect
    allow death,black,sad,tears
    to take over us in the time of need

    I touched death with my hands,
    I felt death in my womb
    I pressed death on my chest
    And I saw death in each and one of you.

    I watched death put and end to a pain
    A tiny fragile man eaten away by an illness
    Taking his last breath on earth
    Waving goodbye to his tearful grandchild-me

    And I felt pain pressing in my body
    Breaking my hearth and my sanity
    Giving birth to my dead little baby
    Smelling death,on my hospital bed

    I don`t know what death means to you,
    But I know that you felt it too,
    Either smell it,touch it or feel it
    You must see it,even watch it take over you.





    Submitted on 2005-09-11 03:23:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      man i love this poem.. its so moving but yet so real... your english is great and i like some of your flaws because it reflects some cultre behind the poem and i like that about it.. the flow is awesome and the emotives you used were amazing.
    | Posted on 2005-09-19 00:00:00 | by unnatainable | [ Reply to This ]
      Death is a very cold thing. Comes without warning for those who are closest to you. This poem made me feel that, it is a great piece of poetry.
    | Posted on 2005-09-11 00:00:00 | by wallya20 | [ Reply to This ]
      Great poem lots of feeling
    Tis work definatly reached me
    I could almost feel your pain
    keep writing
    I will look forward to more
    of your work
    | Posted on 2005-09-11 00:00:00 | by acapone | [ Reply to This ]


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