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    dots Submission Name: Wind Stormdots

    Author: Emma_closes
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 88/111/44
    Words: 167
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       The first stanza is intended to be sung in the original tune.

    This piece is sort of somewhere between hope and dispare. Other than that I'll leave interpretation up to the reader.

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    dotsWind Stormdots

    Well the weather outside is frightful,
    but the fire is so delightful,
    so since we've got no place to go...

    Let it blow,
    let it blow,
    let it blow.

    There are storms rollin' in
    doesn't that fire sound delightful?
    To burn the buildings all away
    so hurricanes have nothing left,
    come judgement day.
    We'd cut off a foot
    to save a leg.
    (So to speak).
    Well, I know my argument is weak,
    but it's all that I can do.
    So do your best, Mother Nature.
    You'll soon learn
    this land won't burn.

    We've lived through an apocalypse
    we sure as hell can weather this,
    one more little storm.
    I know it seems a shame
    that nothing here will change
    and the corruption will remain,
    but don't you fret
    my dear wind storm,
    you did your best;
    But disease will just endure.

    You'll still leave here
    with nothing to show
    so let it blow,
    let it blow,
    let it blow.

    Submitted on 2005-09-11 13:09:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Cool write, seems quite insightful! The "let it snow" song theme seemed a little 'iffy' to me but after reading it all and seeing what it was about I like it.
    | Posted on 2005-09-11 00:00:00 | by Catalist | [ Reply to This ]
      A little rough but very good.

    You'll soon learn
    this land won't burn.
    would maybe thlow a little better as

    You'll soon learn
    That this land won't be through

    I most depressing concept in a way. That the evil of the world wont be beaten. Keep at this i like even its rough spots
    this land won't burn.
    | Posted on 2005-09-11 00:00:00 | by WandWielder | [ Reply to This ]

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