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    dots Submission Name: Speak what your heart saysdots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 208
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSpeak what your heart saysdots
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    It refuses to be contained,
    this heart of mine.

    When pressured into submission
    against the will of my truth
    it crushes against
    glass walls,
    strains against the panes
    I let get built around it.
    I struggle to breathe
    I choke...

    I REVOKE MY PERMISSION,
    relieve you of any authority
    I gave you in error.

    I SMASH
    through your perceived limitations
    and break free from the box
    you try to force others
    to live in with you.
    I will throw not a stone
    at your glass house,
    for I know it is here
    that you feel safe.
    But neither will I be a prisoner
    in its walls.

    Suffocate not my heart.
    It burns fiercely with the passion
    of my truth.
    See the flames in my eyes.
    Feel the fire in my soul.

    Fear not what you see.
    It is merely the reflection
    of your own potential that scares you.
    Try not to snuff out my flame
    because you feel threatened.

    Instead...

    Catch a spark,
    illuminate the dark
    in your own soul.
    Set your heart afire
    let your passion burn.
    Be truly who you are.
    Speak what your heart
    yearns to say...

    Let your truth set you free.




    Submitted on 2005-09-11 15:36:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Never let someone else's discouragements bring one down, as well. One does what they can to help others, but as the writer says here, don't get caught up in their web. I quite agree with you here. We have made the person that we have become and if we are proud of ourselves, than others judgements about our beliefs will not sway us...Because We Are Proud!

    A very powerful poem indeed!

    Smiles,,
    Linda
    | Posted on 2005-12-06 00:00:00 | by AlabamaFarmGirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Life is like that.
    We sometimes find ourselves in a place where we're living as others expect us to.. and not as who we truly are.
    To break free from that is something we should all aspire to do. As hard as it may be at first. I'm still trying.
    And it doesn't mean you stop loving the one who may have held you back.. but in being yourself.. you can love them and others more.. and love yourself more in the process.
    I like the thought behind this. It has me thinking.. which means it's a good write.
    Thanks and take care,
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-09-12 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Ahhh Kate, the limitations we all sense is fear and mostly fear of success, but I don't see that you have it. And anytime we feel limited by someone's ability to understand (if we've given our best shot at helping them) maybe it's just not the right place for us to be.

    This feels like an artistic rant and I like the image of the window, limitations bid that we stay where we are. Love bids that we move, sounds like someone in your life hasn't kept up with you. but pardon my speculations.

    I like how you've used "the will of my truth" as a barometer in how relationships go, and understand perfectly why this write came about. There isn't anything about this to change, so I can't. It's perfectly clear and full of the stuff good writing is made of straight truth. Wonderful job, thanks!
    peace and love,
    Nan
    | Posted on 2005-09-11 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      Sadly, most people have been in relationships like this (I know I have), and it sucks. I hope that if this is really going on in your life that it remedies itself somehow. I like the anger and rebellion in this and the use of capitals. The only thing that I did really care for were the inverted lines like "Suffocate not my heart." I think "Don't suffocate my heart" works just as well. I also like how you tell this guy how he should treat you (Well, your narrator does). Lots of hugs, Amy
    | Posted on 2005-09-11 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree totally with Alia. Its such a nice break from the dark crap and brain teasers. your clear and to the poing, i can feel the expression in your writing, like its really comming from your gut. its strong, its true, its real, and, its on my favorites. God i hope i can learn to write like this!
    | Posted on 2005-09-11 00:00:00 | by The Blue Panda | [ Reply to This ]


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