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    dots Submission Name: guiding lightdots
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    Author: WandWielder
    ASL Info:    21-f-maryland
    Elite Ratio:    4.42 - 55/62/16
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 801
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       My first true attempt at love poetry after i got married april 2004.


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    dotsguiding lightdots
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    An unwavering sparkle,
    A twinkle of light,
    That completely penetrates,
    The darkest black of life.

    An undying guide,
    It signs in true luminescence,
    Radiating warmth and deepest character.

    An unbreakable beam,
    A sight that melts the heart,
    And warms the soul,
    My love, true light, His eyes.




    Submitted on 2005-09-11 17:50:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like it, all that description for someone's eyes that is love right there. the sparkle unwavering sounds like a strong bond. I also like radiating warmth and deep character that is a lovely touch. The eyes are the windows to the soul and its looks like you gaze at each others deeply. nice one,
    ~mike
    | Posted on 2005-09-11 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
      What a heartwarming poem about the one you love...very touching and eloquently written as well. I liked the imagery here and it made me feel all warm and fuzzy inside! cher
    | Posted on 2005-09-11 00:00:00 | by Inducted_Kitty | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem is very happy and joyous.
    i'm imagining my self getting married and all your descriptions might have been the feeling that i'm going to feel when i do get married.
    ppl can relate to this poem and i say...i do too.

    "An unbreakable beam,
    A sight that melts the heart,
    And warms the soul,
    My love, true light, His eyes"
    this part is especially my favorite out of all..although i also like the part where you said..."An undying guide,"
    it feels so alive.
    if you know what i mean..
    good job.

    -fearless
    | Posted on 2005-09-11 00:00:00 | by Fearless | [ Reply to This ]


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