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    dots Submission Name: Silent Roardots
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    Author: Fearless
    ASL Info:    16fPhillippines
    Elite Ratio:    6.48 - 85/63/19
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
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    Description:
       This poem was inspired when i went to a school dance.
    My crush and i were dancing very slow and romantically when suddenly, Jay-Z's song came playing....we let go and he was dancing like a pimp.
    A music can change your attitude and the way you act.
    D.J. next time...please don't play Jay-Z after a slow dance.
    everything on this poem was true. He is a beast.
    ENJOY!


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    dotsSilent Roardots
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    As the harmony soothed the savage beast, it came upon me without a warning.
    My hands were raised on to a big prideful arms.
    my feet were going back and forth like the others.
    My waist was touched by a gemini
    and my body against a beast.
    As the harmony goes on, i learned to trust the innocent and laid my head to it's shoulder.
    As he did the same, we held on to each other.
    A whisper was revealed to an agreement of friendship.
    Slowly the harmony started to fade away and played, 'Snoop Dog'.
    With a force we let go of each other.
    For a beast, stay as a beast.




    Submitted on 2005-09-11 18:21:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'd say this was a very interesting poem. The dance that you portrayed was quite fluid. Everything seemed to somewhat make sense as it went on. I especially like that line - "As the harmony goes on, i learned to trust the innocent and laid my head to it's shoulder."

    That line made it even better for me. It was nice through out. Your description was great. Interesting how you compared the whole situation to a beast that you came to trust. Then finally adding that a beast is a beast. Somewhat putting forward the fact that the beast might have his quirks but it is your beast. I don't know why get that idea but that was how it played in my head.

    Great, keep it up..
    peace and empathy,
    | Posted on 2007-09-15 00:00:00 | by forestspirit | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, for being so young you certainly can write some deep poems, with that mature tone that I've found lacking in my poems.

    Glad to see you posted another poem, when are you going to post another? CAuse I'm BACK!
    | Posted on 2006-01-10 00:00:00 | by acommoncold | [ Reply to This ]
      i read the poem without reading the poem first and it made no sense to me but after reading the description this is a good piece of writing and its strange how right you are. Music is a powerful thing and it controls emotions the slow song that was playing first had you both feeling loving very slow nice and passionate but when a faster song started playing within one instant that changed it can be related to alot of things in life...i can actually see you and him both at the prom i love when poems paint a picture so this is good keep it up
    | Posted on 2005-09-14 00:00:00 | by wallya20 | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this has a good back round to it since i am sure so many othr hold the sme feeling of jerks being all pimp like and anoying all of asudden bing human for a just one song that you both share with each other its rather amazing. I think its a good peice but the only thing i would change about it is the rhythem because it kind of throws off the hole poem if you know what i mean. Good thoughts tho

    xoxox -Thirst4Serenity- xoxox
    | Posted on 2005-09-11 00:00:00 | by Thirst4Serenity | [ Reply to This ]
      and the beast rears it's old ugly head as usual..yes all to common, I love the purity of the dance that you portrayed here, the simplest of gestures, the letting go moment...the armor slipping, the machismo nerves around the shoulders just loosening for a moment...to your liking, and everything seems as though it could go in a direction that spins the earths axis in a new direction..but low and behold, the dream is just a dream as usual..lol..sorry he was such an ass..sis..:)
    | Posted on 2005-09-15 00:00:00 | by Reckoner | [ Reply to This ]



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