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Vengeance Chapter 1

Author: wallya20
ASL Info:    18/m/Bahamas
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me venting my frustration. tell me what you think

Vengeance Chapter 1

Hate's/Love's Vengeance Chapter 1

I hate you honestly,
Damn all the things you promised me,
You comfort me when I wanted love,
Loved me when I needed comfort,
Bickered and lied,
But called me your love,
Or was that me?
Don't leave please! I love you honestly,
Cradle my head,
Say you want me,
I need the reassurance desperately.
Why are you touching me?
Don't..... Stop!
Don't stop loving,
Can you hear me baby, I said love me.
My room is filling with water,
Save, Leave, Love, Hate MEEEEEE!
I'm going to DIE, don't let me!
You promised to never let go,
I said let me go,
But with my last words,
Listen to me I hhhaaaatte youuuuu
Love me.

Submitted on 2005-09-11 22:22:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I liked this one alot, damn ur a contradiction in your head, i know how that is tho and I liked this a little better then the general "I hate loving you" thing cuz it seemed a little more. confusing lol back and forth back and forth between two different desires, damn yeah this was good it got me thinking and in five minutes I'll have a headache trying to make this all totally make sense:p jk hun good stuff.,
peace <3
| Posted on 2006-05-28 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
  i love it...i love the way that you said "hate me love me hate me love me" i love that...i feel that way sometimes...great poem

<3 adalae
| Posted on 2005-09-13 00:00:00 | by lifeNsoul1224 | [ Reply to This ]

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