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    dots Submission Name: Vengeance Chapter 1dots
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    Author: wallya20
    ASL Info:    18/m/Bahamas
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 113/68/26
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Story/Venting
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    dotsVengeance Chapter 1dots
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    Hate's/Love's Vengeance Chapter 1

    I hate you honestly,
    Damn all the things you promised me,
    You comfort me when I wanted love,
    Loved me when I needed comfort,
    Bickered and lied,
    But called me your love,
    Or was that me?
    Don't leave please! I love you honestly,
    Cradle my head,
    Say you want me,
    I need the reassurance desperately.
    Why are you touching me?
    Don't..... Stop!
    Don't stop loving,
    Can you hear me baby, I said love me.
    My room is filling with water,
    Save, Leave, Love, Hate MEEEEEE!
    I'm going to DIE, don't let me!
    You promised to never let go,
    I said let me go,
    But with my last words,
    Listen to me I hhhaaaatte youuuuu
    Love me.




    Submitted on 2005-09-11 22:22:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I liked this one alot, damn ur a contradiction in your head, i know how that is tho and I liked this a little better then the general "I hate loving you" thing cuz it seemed a little more. confusing lol back and forth back and forth between two different desires, damn yeah this was good it got me thinking and in five minutes I'll have a headache trying to make this all totally make sense:p jk hun good stuff.,
    peace <3
    | Posted on 2006-05-28 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      i love it...i love the way that you said "hate me love me hate me love me" i love that...i feel that way sometimes...great poem

    <3 adalae
    | Posted on 2005-09-13 00:00:00 | by lifeNsoul1224 | [ Reply to This ]


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