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    dots Submission Name: Back to Atlantisdots

    Author: Dipsomniac
    Elite Ratio:    3.47 - 59/70/18
    Words: 55
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsBack to Atlantisdots

    Drunken and tired
    She stumbles
    And clings to her lover
    While she moves back
    Back to Atlantis

    No, not a dream
    Liveliest of nightmares
    Sprites born of lust
    Spawning there
    Back in Atlantis

    Withered and tattered
    A soul so tired
    Looks for it's resting place
    And finds it back there
    Back in Atlantis

    Submitted on 2005-09-11 23:00:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey dipsomniac
    its great to see ur works still up, being so far away...{hey any news from there?its tuesday so im guessin anythin happen?} this is an interesting poem, shows how someone so lost can be found...its short, but a good short ya know? i like the ending of the three stanzas, did u do the ending of the first diff. on purpose?? if so, good touch..if not, still cool.hehe.
    i'd have to say my fav line was

    No, not a dream
    Liveliest of nightmares

    great write...once again..hehe
    keep them comin alan, missin u here
    | Posted on 2005-09-13 00:00:00 | by DeepsLighter | [ Reply to This ]
    very creative to be sure.
    well written also.
    you did a good job of painting a picture for your readers.

    'No, not a dream
    Liveliest of nightmares
    Sprites born of lust
    Spawning there
    Back in Atlantis'

    i really like that part. I like the words you used here.. sprites instead of spirits. Very nice. It really can make a difference in a poem.

    As i said very creative and your discriptions are very well done.
    I enjoyed this.
    I hope to read more from you.
    Take care-
    | Posted on 2005-09-12 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]

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