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    dots Submission Name: Charter in Realtimedots
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    Author: amun
    Elite Ratio:    6.53 - 31/14/9
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       learning about love,
    and more,
    that's not so fine


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    dotsCharter in Realtimedots
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    All at once these cold orbs
    marked the dsitance of the night
    shattered by separation
    wanting the pain to stop.
    I hear my breathing
    the mantra of life
    these days are gone
    as soon as goals are reached
    my life drawn away, relentlessly.
    insipid creatures stalk
    with words of no meaning
    I'm given a sword
    to cut away the useless.

    To abide in dreams long placed inside
    their will is my command.
    Today I hear innuendos
    we exchange
    ringing in my mind
    like a three alarm fire,
    the racemaster's
    yellow flag swirls figure eights
    free birds, like homeless canaries
    sing in flight.
    I wonder what we're all about.





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