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    dots Submission Name: Sunlightdots
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    Author: K
    ASL Info:    26/Namibia/Africa
    Elite Ratio:    5.64 - 183/172/46
    Words: 262
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
    Total Views: 782
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1604



    Description:
       This guy had a panic attack...


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    dotsSunlightdots
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    As the sun's rays hit my skin, I felt an unusual glowing warmth.
    I'm in the sun daily, but this was a uniquely, different, life changing experience.
    I sensed an all powerful presence touch me..I could feel the rays slowly penetrate my skin and through each and every one of my defenses, until for a brief moment they pierced right through me...
    I was naked.
    I was completely exposed to an unforgiving, scorching force.
    My thick, impenetrable walls carefully constructed over time to guard against anyone trying to come close to me, were obliterated in an instant.
    With nowhere to run, a feeling of an all powerful truth overpowered my senses.
    It was the truth I (and everyone else) try to run from daily and pretend doesn't exist.
    It was a haunting memory of the place I am from.
    A place that existed before time.
    A place we will all return to.
    A place residing in truth.
    I struggled to hang onto sanity as this all seeing touch clutching onto me, threatened to drag me with it.
    For a moment I couldn't relate to our superficial world with its warped values.
    I was lost in a world where true brotherhood existed and souls connected, entwined themselves and seemed to flow through each other.
    That's when I heard someone call me and I had no choice but to answer:"I'm coming..."
    because my time to return to paradise had not yet come.
    For those wondering what truth I am talking about, I would suggest that you let the sun touch you....




    Submitted on 2005-09-12 07:14:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think it it could have ended better. It was to short of an ending and really did not explain much.
    I do understand what you are talking about when i read this, sometimes i often feel like this when i am on break from work.
    The write does go into depth but i feel that you could go more deeper into what you are feeling and what you want to feel.

    It is very well written and i can tell that you did put alot of thought into this but i do see that in some places it could be worded different.
    Keep up the good work.
    Bailey19
    | Posted on 2005-09-12 00:00:00 | by Bailey19 | [ Reply to This ]


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