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    dots Submission Name: Out of Reasonsdots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       This is just a random, off the top of my head thing that I just wrote so I'd have something to post.


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    dotsOut of Reasonsdots
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    I'm out of reasons to cry,
    Yet I can't resist
    Giving myself one more reason
    When I give in to a kiss.
    I'm out of reasons to smile,
    But my lips tend to disobey
    When you see that I'm pissed off,
    And you smile at me that way.
    I'm out of reasons to stay,
    Yet I keep giving in.
    I can't help but do anything I can
    Just to lie with you once again.
    I'm out of reasons to feel,
    But your hands take away what's numb.
    I die a little when you go away.
    I'm brought to life when you succumb.
    I'm out of reasons to write this poem,
    I only had a few.
    Now I'm just waiting for the moment
    When my reason is no longer you.




    Submitted on 2005-09-12 09:11:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was a really great write! I really loved how you worded this whole piece. I liked how you had every reason for what you said you had no reason for. It was a very interesting piece to read and I'm glad that I did!
    I hear ya on that "just to have something to post" thing too. Some of those turned out to be my best. I agree that this was really great for something that just came off the top of your head! Great job!
    Candi
    | Posted on 2005-09-12 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, very creative love poem. It's very sweet and I like how you grip the reader to the middle and they find exactly what your talking about. Beautiful piece for the top of your head. I enjoyed reading it! :)
    | Posted on 2005-09-12 00:00:00 | by Indelible_ink | [ Reply to This ]


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