its an interesting poem. vivid.. but i always like that.
i think that you ended it too soon. maybe just a sentance more.
i like the simplicity and the way it makes you think and question. it has alot of really interesting parts.
'Help me when i`m in the light And i will be there for you, I will take the day And i will turn it into night.'
like here.. when most would say help me when im in the dark.. you say light. and you will turn the day into night. i love that. i love the night and i really like how you turned that around.
'Take my dreams and run away Touch the sky for me Promise me you will be there To adore Dont ask me where.'
touch the sky for me.. i dont know why, but that part really jumped out at me. i like it alot. maybe just putting .. just dont ask me where.. i dont know. i just think it would fit better. But thats just one persons opinion. you did a great job on this ~ jennifer