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    dots Submission Name: Blurry Visiondots

    Author: SorrowfulMind
    ASL Info:    18/Female/Alton, IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 27/39/13
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 1050
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       Prequel to "This Is My Diary"

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    dotsBlurry Visiondots

    I'm writing, just writing to me
    To show what my true feelings be.

    I'm not quite sure just what I feel.
    I'm not yet sure just when I'll heal.

    The pain of all the news I've learned
    Has dug in deep. So deep, it burns.

    I can't control these thoughts so strong.
    I can't believe the truth so wrong.

    I want to think it's all a dream,
    But it's more real that it may seem.

    I want to make it go away.
    Not live to see another day.

    But all this time I've lived for him,
    And I'll be strong until the end.

    I know that there will someday be
    Something more than misery.

    I know he'll realize what he has
    And make it so we'll always last.

    But, if he doesn't see it soon,
    Then, I'll be gone to walk alone.

    Submitted on 2005-09-12 11:44:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a good write where you expressed your inner most feelings quite well
    I really enjoyed reading this

    And Thank You for your recent comments
    I am glad you enjoyed my poetry
    All of my poems are written with short lines as I kind of find that style of writing very easy to get a point across
    Keep writing as it helps heal
    God Bless
    | Posted on 2006-01-13 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      very nice, short, sweet two line stanza's with a unique taste to them...I don't know why noone else has commented...people just don't take the time anymore...anyway, I enjoyed the piece...will be reading "This is my Diary" I get on onlook into a girls diary...hehe, anyway...good stuff (read mine)

    | Posted on 2005-09-12 00:00:00 | by Anarius | [ Reply to This ]

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