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    dots Submission Name: A Lie Only Does So Muchdots
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    Author: SorrowfulMind
    ASL Info:    18/Female/Alton, IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 27/39/13
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Destroying everything that's fine
    And everything that's whole,
    Through the pieces of the withered mind
    And pieces of the soul.

    In the broken parts of my own heart,
    My dreams have come undone,
    And my shattered thoughts have fall'n apart
    With pain and hurt to come.

    My secrets soon start breaking,
    And my memory will fly,
    And my heart will then start aching
    From the pain this will apply.

    And the joyous laughter that you hear
    Will never be the same,
    For each ounce of pain in every tear
    Is calling out my name.

    But, it seems it never starts to slow,
    To you're surpise you find,
    From now till death, you'll know,
    What a lie does to the mind




    Submitted on 2005-09-12 11:46:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yes you definately worded this well
    Lies do Hurt
    The biggest lie of all is when someone says they Love and Treasure you and they really dont
    One can build a lifetime around these words only to be seriously hurt in the end
    Avery good and caring write
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-01-14 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nice ...i dont actually think ive ever read anything like this ..so definatly two thumbs up for it being so original ....I dont have anything bad to say about this at all ....It was easy to read and the meaning behind it was incredible
    | Posted on 2005-09-12 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
      This has the ring of the terminally depressed laughing to avoid crying, fearful someone might lift the mask at an inopportune time and see the 'real' you, dying where you stand. The fact that tears call you by name lends resonance to this brief work and illustrates the downward spiral into that sad mealstrom you feel is unaviodable. This was nicely written.
    | Posted on 2005-09-12 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this, i cant explain, but i feel something deep inside that connects with what you write here. A lie is a terrible thing, and if its you thats told one - your conscience does damage to your mind. Unthinkable things. Im adding this to my favourites, becasue it has a meaning, and although i do not write here with words accessing your poem, its does however make me want to read it over and over and over.
    | Posted on 2005-09-12 00:00:00 | by master raz | [ Reply to This ]


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