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    dots Submission Name: The Problemdots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 184
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       This is just how I feel right now...Raisin you said that all I write about it drugs and pain/it's all I feel...but I think that this is the light at the end of the tunnel and thanks for makin me think about that.

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    dotsThe Problemdots

    And sometimes you lose
    and sometimes it seems like you are just on another bad trip

    somewhere amongst the countertop and the floor you find yourself
    but I bet it's really hard to believe that you are still there
    because half the time you don't even think that you have made any sense
    and you don't feel like you use to
    you don't feel like you are yourself at all
    and it hurts to think that on this way to discovery all that you discovered is that you lost yourself...somewhere in the middle of the lysterine strips in your refrigerator and the footballs in your back yard
    climbing ladders
    melting the bars in your mouth
    and you think that you see the truth
    the truth that really isn't to be seen at all
    because honestly, I don't think that absolutely there is one
    but I've lost myself to know this
    and I kind of wish I had just been a good girl
    but now I'm bitter with what I've found
    and I promise you will be too

    Submitted on 2005-09-12 12:56:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      damn . . . this was intense. it just left me speachless. made me wanna curl up in a ball and suck my thumb . . . hehe. yeah, it was really good and moving. good [censored].
    | Posted on 2005-09-14 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      Very real. I can truly believe this is your life or the lives of many other people. Losing yourself i think happens to almost everyone at some point in their life. Wishing to be a good girl or in my case a good guy would be what i wish for if i could. I love the way you make it that real though not trying to add something that isn't there is a great job and i enjoy your poem a whole lot. Good writing skills.
    | Posted on 2005-09-13 00:00:00 | by wallya20 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so sad, Jaz. Just think life would be a little easier if you hadn't gotten started in the first place. Maybe you should learn to listen to your big sister, she's wiser than you think. Yeah, I've done some stupid things, but the only place I lost myself was through love, not drugs or alcohol or anything like that. You've done both. This was really beautiful. It brought tears to my sad little eyes.
    | Posted on 2005-09-13 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]

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