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my tune


Author: love gone wrong
ASL Info:    27/m/colorado
Elite Ratio:    2.14 - 337 /381 /42
Words: 44
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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Description:

i wrote this with someone specific in mind.....you know who you are


my tune


the smell of you...
intoxicating
the taste of you...
titillating
your strong hips...
gyrating
your pouting lips...
quivering
your velvet thighs...
trembling
come closer
push me deeper...
within,
with sin
you are my sun,
you are my moon...
my world, my balance,
my tune




Submitted on 2004-04-16 14:43:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  ooo... nice write. no pretty'ing it up.. just straight out with it... great write!
| Posted on 2004-04-17 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  thiiiisss is efinately a favorite... the word choice was [censored] perfect. Gave off the very scent of seduction, a very hot write my friend. Very lucky girl.
| Posted on 2004-04-16 00:00:00 | by Voodoo_Lounge | [ Reply to This ]
  *blushes* It's very good. Passionate to say the least. Excellent word choice. <><
| Posted on 2004-04-16 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]
  definately evident passion. cutshort, pushed to the point. expression all there. i enjoyed it.
| Posted on 2004-04-16 00:00:00 | by dustyshelves | [ Reply to This ]
  WOW! that was a great write I wish someone would write like that about me...lol keep up the good skills
| Posted on 2004-04-16 00:00:00 | by Broken Angel | [ Reply to This ]


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