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    dots Submission Name: tattered shoebox dreamsdots
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    Author: reveries
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 54/74/23
    Words: 29
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 804
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    Description:
       oh come on!....I'm sure you can figure it out...I have faith! :-P


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    dotstattered shoebox dreamsdots
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    I write letters to you
    and seal them in
    heart-shaped
    gold-laced
    envelopes
            a fool
    I know
          nonsense collected in
    tattered shoebox dreams




    Submitted on 2005-09-12 19:22:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is nothing short of exquisite. This poem is pleasing to the eye well, the spacing calls attention to the words in very striking. As for the "heart shaped box"...Kurt Cobain did not invent the heart shaped box. Besides the box isnt heart shaped, the envelopes are heart shaped. Isnt it funny how people see what they want to see. This is a defineite fav.
    | Posted on 2005-09-12 00:00:00 | by Tarwen Nevle | [ Reply to This ]
      i think you snagged the idea from "heart shaped box" . . . whatevers. u tried to make the idea your own . . . i'm not sure it worked.
    | Posted on 2005-09-12 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      Short yet sweet and straight to the point. You have my vote. It is hard to write a poem that short and it have so much meaning. I really hope to see more poems done by you; keep writing!
    ~Krystina~
    | Posted on 2005-09-12 00:00:00 | by takenspiritwind | [ Reply to This ]
      i like.
    one of few free-verse poems that have an immediate flow to them.

    this would be a really good spoken-word poem too.
    bravo.
    | Posted on 2005-09-12 00:00:00 | by jeffiner | [ Reply to This ]


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