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    dots Submission Name: Love In Disguisedots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 213
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Wrote this last night. I've cut myself off from the world, and all I can do is write some of the saddest poetry of my life.


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    dotsLove In Disguisedots
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    I used to stay up late at night
    Just to watch you sleep.
    And I never bothered looking down
    Before I took that leap.
    That leap that brought me straight to your arms,
    Looking into your eyes.
    I thought we were just having fun,
    But it was love in a clever disguise.

    I used to sit and think of things
    That would make you smile.
    And I always knew you'd be THAT one,
    Despite my useless denials.
    I thought I'd found my reason
    To give in to happiness.
    You forever changed my life
    When you gave me that first kiss.

    I used to think of reasons to call,
    Just to hear your voice.
    I never thought it would go this far,
    But I made my choice.
    We talked about our future together,
    Even gave our "son" a name.
    How was I to know when you touched me
    That I'd never be the same?

    I used to think that you were my everything,
    The only one meant for me.
    Then you told me you were leaving,
    And I had to set you free.
    "We" were gone so quickly,
    Just the slightest whisper through the years.
    I've stopped believing that you'll come back,
    But I wish you would wipe away my tears.




    Submitted on 2005-09-13 09:14:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i love this poem i can relate to it im going throuh something like that now usually long poems bore me too but it kept me intrested, very talented very good
    | Posted on 2006-07-29 00:00:00 | by Bowser9669 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, I could really relate to this, but I loved the quite sort of expression inside each verse. Great work.
    | Posted on 2006-07-29 00:00:00 | by Corbow6 | [ Reply to This ]
      this is indeed a fabulous peice of poetry-the rythme is that soft and sad lulling feel, the flow is brilliantly figured. keep it up:-)
    | Posted on 2005-11-02 00:00:00 | by vampire | [ Reply to This ]
      oh oh oh oh. This made me cry. Hun, are you ok?? This is remarkable and oh so sad. I just don't know what to think. It's definately on my favorites list. It is so sad soooo sad. I just want to wipe your tears away now. um. I hope it gets better.

    Blessed Be
    | Posted on 2005-09-13 00:00:00 | by Sarah Leger | [ Reply to This ]
      wow wow you are such a good writer so talented normally long poems bore me this poem reminds me of something that i am sort of going through right now and puts things in perspective i am very glad i read this today i try to be critical but i love this poem too
    | Posted on 2005-09-13 00:00:00 | by sweetrstangel18 | [ Reply to This ]


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