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    dots Submission Name: Highschooldots
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    Author: Sarah Leger
    ASL Info:    15.f.kissimmee,Fl
    Elite Ratio:    3.74 - 436/387/80
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 969
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1207



    Description:
       Written for the same purpose 'Fragile-handle with care-' was. Please comment.


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    dotsHighschooldots
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    A drop.
    A tear.
    A love.
    A fear.
    Bless my soul
    For they say I sinned.

    With obsession I hide
    Let loose a grin
    The obserdity of life's every whim
    I am here
    Oh so ready to begin
    The bloom of my life.
    Open to my soul
    Searching
    Through tragedy
    For something to make me whole
    Morning to late
    I forgot to hide
    Forgot to hide from those who follow
    The cloning of one's individuality
    Mocking me
    Mocking my mannerisms

    For shame?
    one would think
    once again I am wrong
    In dire need to survive
    however drowning in my depths
    It's over
    I'm over
    Another clone of tragedy
    Newborn sheep to join the flock
    Stab away at me
    My insecurities made real
    They feed at my flesh
    SO that I feel
    Killing those I love
    Ripping what I hold
    -dear-

    And it's over
    Because I am overcome

    by fear.




    Submitted on 2005-09-13 12:39:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Shucks. Highschool is a big crackwhore. With big titties. And I love it so thats why I'm pimpin it for $99. [Nate rolls down car window] "How much?" - - "$99 to move it." - [Jeremy] "Wait what?" - "Didnt you know when you asked me out?" -[nate waiting unpationtly] - "Make me that money!" [you walk toward car] [Heather looks terrified as you open the door] [nate speeds away] HAHAHAH
    <333

    Fukk Love from Within
    | Posted on 2005-09-14 00:00:00 | by Thinkingofyou | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought this was a very profound poem full of deep feeling and the key to your strength. I do not know the specifics of the reasons for your writing of this but I felt I should comment and share my views. The poem itself flows very well and you have a very powerful ending which is good. you misspelled absurdity but that's not a big deal. the only thing I am concerned about is you. hopefully you are just expressing your feelings and this will help you to hang in there and be strong with whatever you are dealing with. very good writing, though--definitely.
    | Posted on 2005-09-13 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]


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