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    dots Submission Name: Heartfelt Architect/Piss offdots

    Author: wallya20
    ASL Info:    18/m/Bahamas
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 113/68/26
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Relate to it. Im sure it happened to you atleast once. Tell me how you feel

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    dotsHeartfelt Architect/Piss offdots

    Now youíre my architect
    Form the foundation
    Make sure itís sturdy, its is going to hold everything I feel
    For you only
    This is not a small task
    Your meticulous work will pay off

    I no I was in dire need of work
    Plot and tinker
    Think of me as clay, mold me into what you want me to become
    Use your exquisite taste and form the outside

    Is this what you want?

    You canít have it
    Itís not that simple I donít want to change for you
    Why should I have to?
    Canít you just love me for what I am and what I want to become?

    Distress and anxiety are two of my best features
    So you dare not begin to imagine what my worst are
    I know one thing for sure though,
    There is not one inch of my body that says to be changed
    I came with no manual, no instructions
    Made to have flaws is what we all should say
    My features, my unique construction is not to be tampered with
    Take your heartfelt architecture to someone else

    Submitted on 2005-09-13 14:32:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was cool...in my honest opinion I think that it took talent to write this...I like the imagery in this when you are talking about yourself...well what I took to be you, the words...

    Distress and anxiety are two of my best features

    For some reason I just really liked this part...and the way you push them away in the end...good job.

    Peace love and empathy

    | Posted on 2005-09-16 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Yupp I can relate! I had that happen to me once except I gave myself to the person and well...was lost. But now I'm back and we are no longer together. I really liked this poem too! Hope to see more!
    | Posted on 2005-09-13 00:00:00 | by takenspiritwind | [ Reply to This ]

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