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Heartfelt Architect/Piss off

Author: wallya20
ASL Info:    18/m/Bahamas
Elite Ratio:    8 - 113 /68 /26
Words: 189
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Relate to it. Im sure it happened to you atleast once. Tell me how you feel

Heartfelt Architect/Piss off

Now you’re my architect
Form the foundation
Make sure it’s sturdy, its is going to hold everything I feel
For you only
This is not a small task
Your meticulous work will pay off

I no I was in dire need of work
Plot and tinker
Think of me as clay, mold me into what you want me to become
Use your exquisite taste and form the outside

Is this what you want?

You can’t have it
It’s not that simple I don’t want to change for you
Why should I have to?
Can’t you just love me for what I am and what I want to become?

Distress and anxiety are two of my best features
So you dare not begin to imagine what my worst are
I know one thing for sure though,
There is not one inch of my body that says to be changed
I came with no manual, no instructions
Made to have flaws is what we all should say
My features, my unique construction is not to be tampered with
Take your heartfelt architecture to someone else

Submitted on 2005-09-13 14:32:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This was my honest opinion I think that it took talent to write this...I like the imagery in this when you are talking about yourself...well what I took to be you, the words...

Distress and anxiety are two of my best features

For some reason I just really liked this part...and the way you push them away in the end...good job.

Peace love and empathy

| Posted on 2005-09-16 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
  Yupp I can relate! I had that happen to me once except I gave myself to the person and well...was lost. But now I'm back and we are no longer together. I really liked this poem too! Hope to see more!
| Posted on 2005-09-13 00:00:00 | by takenspiritwind | [ Reply to This ]

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