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    dots Submission Name: The Devil's Thoughtsdots
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    Author: takenspiritwind
    ASL Info:    21/F/NH
    Elite Ratio:    4.35 - 117/95/38
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsThe Devil's Thoughtsdots
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    I seek an eternal darkness that
    spreads upon this broken land.
    I see with blind eyes the insanity
    that is passed from person to person.
    I hold so close at heart your pathetic
    life but do not cherish it!
    I tie down your soul damned to be
    Bind by your own greed and
    thoughtlessness.
    I bear myself to your soul forever
    spilling my insanity into your
    hollowed veins.
    And now it has come to pass that
    you understand not the will to die or live.
    A life shed is a tear lost to a life
    that was passed as sane!




    Submitted on 2005-09-13 14:46:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this was kinda cool but I agree with Imbrogilo...are u a satanist or against it??? it kinda makes a difference in the exact message of this one...I thought it was an ok write...I"ve seen better and I"ve seen ALOT worse...keep writing.
    ~silent
    | Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      I can't make out in this mess whether you're a satanist who hates herself and what she does in daily life, or if you're a satan-smasher who is fighting to rid herself of his presence. (?)
    | Posted on 2005-09-29 00:00:00 | by The Imbroglio | [ Reply to This ]
      I have a lot of pieces that just come to me & I'm not sure what the motivation is or the message. Sometimes it's meant for me to glean a message sometimes I think it's merely for another that needs it.
    This seemed to be about the mundane; Life, etc. It seems like something the devil would be thinking or saying?
    Love,Peace,Joy! tif ; )
    | Posted on 2005-09-13 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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