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Land of the Lonely

Author:	whisperslove
Elite Ratio:	3.96 - 48 /37 /7
Words:	134

Class/Type:	Poetry /Misc
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A lost soul..

Land of the Lonely

She roams the land of the lonely,
soles weary from travel.
Bits of gravel inch their way
into holes torn in her shoes.

She knew this time would come,
for love had turned
to betrayal and deception.

Fully prepared, she wraps
her cloak around her
to fight the frigid air
that seeps into her bones.

Night descends upon her,
darker than shadows
creeping down empty streets,
no lamp to console her,
not a friend in sight
to hold her hand.

Distorted whispers
blow in on the breeze
to torment and ridicule.

"You played the fool
too many times."

Eyes mist to tears falling,
releasing years of broken dreams.
Forever it seems she's searched
these streets for kindred souls,
only to find
she walks alone.

Submitted on 2005-09-13 19:28:28 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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sad. But I think we can all relate to this feeling. In some ways I think none of us are truly alone...there is always someone that we can turn to. But then I think that almost all of us are alone in that even if we have someone to console us, nobody really truly cares, at least not enough to change anything for the better. And that is where we have to rely on inner strength, and this is what determines our character and ultimately our destiny.

I love the opening stanza. Clever and it really sets the tone. Good stuff, in a sad way.

| Posted on 2005-09-19 00:00:00 | by deadndreaming | [ Reply to This ]

graeme took the words right out of my mouth. i really enjoyed the fifth stanza:
"Distorted whispers
blow in on the breeze
to torment and to ridicule."

very well written.

:)

| Posted on 2005-09-13 00:00:00 | by jeffiner | [ Reply to This ]

Yeah, very sad. A nice melancholy, almost wistful walk with a lost soul.

I like this, it's a bit different from the run-of-the-mill lost love poems.

Well done

Be Happy

Graeme

| Posted on 2005-09-13 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]

I love that. It's so sad in a pretty kind of way. The description is awesome. It's like a (very well-worded) story. The end is my favorite:

"Eyes mist to tears falling,
releasing years of broken dreams.
Forever it seems she's searched
these streets for kindred souls,
only to find
she walks alone."

I especially love the last line. You express the lonliness perfectly. I have nothing but compliments for you. Great job

-nikkki

| Posted on 2005-09-13 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]

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