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    dots Submission Name: Hurting (unfinished)dots

    Author: Drea
    ASL Info:    18/f/nowhere
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 289/142/53
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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    dotsHurting (unfinished)dots

    I hear you when you talk
    and when y ou say those things
    I hear your criticisms
    and it causes me pain

    I may not seem to care
    but sometimes it hurts
    Sometimes I cant take
    the mean things you blurt

    I know Im not perfect
    Im not even close
    But Im still human
    And I need someone to hold

    Im going through shit
    and you dont even care
    sometimes I just need to talk
    and your never there

    Submitted on 2005-09-14 03:00:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      really good write and i can totally relate as its what i go through all the time but insted of talking bout it i write it it helps when theres no-one there to listen.. anyways really great write keep it up i hope to read more of your poems
    take care
    izzi xxx
    | Posted on 2005-09-17 00:00:00 | by fallen_angel384 | [ Reply to This ]
      same kind of [censored] i go through still wanting anyone to be there for me but especially the one i love and even she isnt here kinda hurtsz when you want to turn and see someone right there next to you but aint no one there makes me feel like i was never wanted by anyone. i try to go other places for love now i found love with my vietnamese baby girl its a poem of mine i like the way you vented and just put it into words its short straight to the point great withing itself you have a great potential to be the best so just keep your feelings flowing into things like this the real things dont drift into writing fantasy this your life and its what i love to read so keep up the good work honestly i will be back for more
    | Posted on 2005-09-15 00:00:00 | by wallya20 | [ Reply to This ]

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