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    dots Submission Name: Deepdots
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    Author: the apocrypha
    Elite Ratio:    3.37 - 185/192/48
    Words: 52
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       First submitted poem in...three months?


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    Silhouettes dansantes
    Sur les rideaux
    À minuit

    Chants are aimlessly wandering
    Through the city
    Sobs are softly sinking
    In concrete walls
    In hunger, the night
    Is silently stalking
    For those miseries

    Comme la lumière des étoiles
    Qui se noie dans la mer
    The small hours are starving
    For depsair




    Submitted on 2005-09-14 04:18:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This just sounds so very enchanting even though I only understand half of it since it is in a foriegn language...But that makes it more mysterious. -Lindel
    | Posted on 2005-09-14 00:00:00 | by LRRolins | [ Reply to This ]
      It's a lot to grasp in a such a short poem. It does make you wonder however, what exactly you are talking about. Me, I like to be stumped in a sense but only if I can figure it out later. People don't like to be confused. I think you should go fill in a few blanks and be a little more concrete instead of abstract.
    | Posted on 2005-09-14 00:00:00 | by FoxxyRoxxanne | [ Reply to This ]
      Just a few questions to fill in the blanks! What miseries are wondering? I want to know more it just seems too short.
    ~Krystina~
    | Posted on 2005-09-14 00:00:00 | by takenspiritwind | [ Reply to This ]


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