Description: This is dedicated to my cousin, Jessie Thomas. I wrote it when her grandmother passed away. Natural death is a difficult thing to write about, and I just hope that I could do Myrtle some justice with this memorial to her.
One whisper and it's over,
Her eyes are closed forever.
All that's left now are the memories
Of the times that you had together.
One more blink and the air is gone from her lungs.
There'll be no more tears from those eyes.
She finally rests in the peace she deserves.
There'll be no more pain-filled cries.
One final sigh escapes her lips.
Her pain and suffering are done.
She was loved by so many
And now missed by everyone.
One whisper and it's finished.
Her beautiful soul has passed through.
It's okay to grieve for this tragic loss
Just remember that she loved you.
The ending was the part that really got to me. Maybe death by natural causes is a hard subject to write about but you've pulled it off. I hope your cousin Jesse felt better when she read this. Anyways, I'd give this poem a 9.3 out of 10. Keep the poems coming.
This is a very sad but beautifully written piece...i think you expressed the loss very well and the flow etc are perfect ...and it makes for a very easy read...rolls of the end of the tongue so to speak...im sure myrtle would have been very touched...as was I... :)
Very nice. I think you did a great job with this memorial. It was very peaceful and calming to read this. I lost my grandmother almost 3 years ago, but it was from cancer. Your words hit very deep and I applaud you for writing something so sincere. Thank you so much for sharing and you did a wonderful job! Candi
Beautiful and very touching. Funny sometimes how death can end the pain and suffering of one person and begin what seems to be pain and suffering for those left behind. But like you said, focus on the good things and the love the person gave in life. I really liked this one. Have a good one and keep smilin'