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    dots Submission Name: Seams of Secrecydots
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    Author: Dimension_X
    ASL Info:    17/F/NJ
    Elite Ratio:    5.39 - 124/108/70
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 237
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 624



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    alright, well this one is a pantoum, basically a 10 lined poem with every line being repeated once in a specific time. its my first pantoum, but i think that it turned out pretty good.

    &&comments are rad.


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    dotsSeams of Secrecydots
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    You'll have it
    Hidden away
    Tucked carefully around edges,
    Into the seams of secrecy.

    Hidden away
    Under the matress
    Into the seams of secrecy,
    Lie the bodies.

    Under the matress
    Hidden with your secret life
    Lie the bodies,
    The world will see.

    Hidden with your secret life
    Never needing explainations
    The world will see,
    Pre-judgement day is here.

    Never needing explainations
    Tucked carefully around edges
    Pre-judgement day is here,
    You'll have it.




    Submitted on 2005-09-14 14:48:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I liked that a lot. That was like nothing I've ever really read before. I like it a lot! sorry I know I just repeated myself, but what can I say I really, really do. I love the flow it had, I get what you were trying to say and all I have to say is keep on writing and I'll keep on reading.

    ~Mandie Leigh
    | Posted on 2005-09-17 00:00:00 | by Monkey | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is very general which makes it easy to relate to. I like the repitition. One thing I dont like is the pre-judgement part but thats only because I don't quite understand what your trying to say here.?!
    | Posted on 2005-09-14 00:00:00 | by bonita2689 | [ Reply to This ]


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